Mannequin

Great Writing

This story is very clearly going somewhere big! I can't wait for more plot development, but I honestly can say wherever it goes the author has the talent to make it big. The characters are each distinct, and the organization of this story is top tier. I do think there will be a lot of romance, which for me isn't usually the genre I like, but the author is doing a great job of developing it. There were no glaring grammatical or technical issues. I love Cassie! You have done a great job developing her character. Also the sibling dynamic is super well written between Cassie and Jason!

Great Story

Overall this story is very well developed, and the plot is a strong point. The authors ideas are super creative, and come to life in his storytelling. The only complaint I have is that throughout this book there are a lot of grammatical errors and misspellings, which make it a lot harder to stay as involved in the plot for me. However, the character development really pulls the reader back in. Great job!

Really Good so Far

I really like your writing style, and I can't wait to see how this story develops! Overall, I think there aren't really errors in your story. It reminds me of all the YA novels I used to read constantly, so I'm excited to read more of your story!