The fact that every chapter has its focus on a certain person is very creative. Great idea. Your style is descriptive and artistic that it gives the story the depth it deserves. However, since every chapter is slightly different, then every chapter is supposed to have a different tone and character of voice. I could definitely feel that they are different people but I could still sense the constant voice of the author behind them. This is a great thing, but try to make the character's voice more prominent.
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The name is pretty amusing too so hats down for you. Also the category is thriller, although your usage of words matches the genre, the thrilling building up of events and suspense is slightly crooked. I respect the fact that you've completed such a piece of work! Thank you for the read xx