Mark Zhang

Garnet Valley, Pennsylvania

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Hey! I've only finished the first chapter, but I thought that the overall flow of the story is excellent. That being said, there are particular aspects that could be improved, mainly regarding your descriptions of things in the story. Also, it's important to not introduce too many new items to the reader at once, which may confuse them. I will write a more detailed review later, but I think it's overall really impressive and that you should continue working at it.

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