Marian Pattechat

A gripping start

Such a gripping plot! The story starts very promisingly, and I can't wait to see where it will go once the main characters meet!

A riveting story!

I love the plot of the story, it's imaginative and fresh! The FMC is realistic, her character development is compelling, and I can't wait to see her grow further as the book progresses. The world-building is good, and the wording further pulls the reader into a world of castles, princesses, and magic. There are some typos and mix-up of tenses, but nothing that draws the reader out of the story. The story progresses a bit quickly for my taste, but I have to read the whole of it to pass final judgement.

I would advise on more showing rather than telling in the first chapters, so the reader would get to know more about the characters and the world through dialogue rather than exposition. Also, focus more on the characters' emotions in the first several chapters to make the storytelling more impactful from the get-go. As it is, the love between the main characters kind of came out of nowhere (in my view, which of course is subjective), some build-up would have made me more invested in rooting for them from the beginning.

Not that I'm not rooting for them now - you've created a beautiful, gripping story that I can't wait to read more of :) You're very talented, you've won me over as a fan!

Exciting read

I liked this story a lot, it's so addictive you can't put it down! The twists and turns were so many, I was kept on my toes. The world building was captivating, I felt transported in the past. The author definitely has a talent and I plan to read more of their work :)

The story is intriguing, I'm curious to see where it will go next.

I like the premise of this story, the characters sound promising and I would definitely keep reading to see how things will play out :)