Mavericks_Ghost

Ashford,Kent, UK

Computer tech and geek who has always had a creative writing bent. Looking for a decent publisher if one is out there.

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Interesting Story

Sadly I will admit this not my genre. I'm a die hard fan of fantasy like Tolkien or Sci-fi like Buettner or even Horror if you consider my collection of Stephen King so I won't say this story exactly "floats my boat" On the other hand it is a good short story the plot is believable and the length feels about right. I think many teeagers go through feelings like Joyce, it's just the vast majority don't act on them like her! Many self harm or feel suicidal with the same consequences. But I do have to question whether a state would really execute a fourteen year old, seems harsh to me but then I'm in the UK. Joyce is after all someone they legally regard as a child, especially since she's only a maximum of fifteen by the time they end it all. Joyce's motives also seem mixed, she could be construed as noble in Lacey's case, she was acting in defence of her put upon friend Marilyn. Ben though was an act of selfishness. Technically speaking the whole could do with being passed through something like Grammarly, there were a few instances of "are" where the writer should have used "our" or "know" when it should be "no" or "now" Overall though a good story, keep it up!

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Excellent Story

Having finally got round to finishing what has been published online for this book I can only say excellent and I can see why Authorhouse picked it up. Kim I can also see why Alkan wouldn't want to be anywhere near an oracle. After his efforts at the wedding, in his place, I wouldn't want to be anywhere near anyone who can foretell the future or has a direct line to the Gods either. I think that Queen Safis also took exactly the right attitude to him when she found out. He may count it as seduction but to seduce the bride on the day of her wedding?? Then to declare himself the fourteenth God, does Alkan have an ego or what?
My one gripe is the descriptions of the characters, the characters themselves are believable but to go into the minutia of how they are dressed...I would have tended towards leaving it to the readers imagination, but that might just be me. I'll certainly be reading the other storiees.

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Nice start...very nice start

I have to say that western stories are not really my genre. I prefer magical fantasy or science fiction. However, with The Willow Rise Six, I seriously couldn't put it down until I finished what's been published. The characters are incredibly believable. I get a feeling of sympathy for Sam, Peter and Alice, they are caught up in something through their own previous misfortunes, misfortunes they have trouble facing up to, and misfortunes that let Bill wield his influence over them. Levi strikes me as the type I could see being played by Clint Eastwood in his man with no name days, hard as steel and just as cold and uncompromising. While Bill is like a spider, weaving devious, manipulative webs with threats of revealing secrets so he gets people to do what he wants, A mastermind type that treats others like mere puppets.
I very much look forward to the finishing the story.

My only criticism would be technically based. It's small I know but at one point Boone walks into the office having cleaned the blood of his father off himself and the sentence refers to "his firearms having been wiped clean". The story implied Boone beat his father to death rather than shot him! So I would have said forearms would have been a more appropriate word, like I said only a small point and maybe it was a typo

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