Pax is such an interesting character, and the more I read the more I realized how complicated and damaged she was. Each of the characters were unique, and I enjoyed getting to know more about them and loved their relationships with one another. They frequently made me laugh with their antics. I like that Alex and Max end up dating in the end... I liked that dynamic. I couldn't decide who I wanted Pax to end up with, but I like the way everything unfolded.
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I didn't expect the twist that came with prom! That was fun to read. I also really liked the thriller aspect with their older sister. You did a great job of alluding to something bigger in the beginning of the story, so I knew something was coming... but not that! It was also a great twist to the story.
I also liked the message at the end, and it demonstrates the caring side of Pax - I could see that she wanted to believe in love and for Chris to not be like she was in high school. Good stuff.
Once you get to this stage, it'll need some editing - grammar and phrasing. But, that's totally normal, and I'm sure you'll get there! Overall, this was a good story, and I enjoyed the ride!