Colder_Than_Midnight

Sacramento, CA, USA

I am Mian Luna Coler-Flowe, or I’m known as Jeje G on AO3. I am a Slytherin pureblood known at Hogwarts as Anastasia Prince-Slytherin.

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Absolutely undeniably fantastic

It was perfectly written. I got so emotional. If felt very real. You made it come to life. I got to see pain, love, sadness, anger, all described in perfect detail to make it seem as if it were happening right in front of me. They were almost no grammar mistakes. It was perfect, and your writing style is great. All in all the story is fantastic. Would recommend to everyone.

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Pretty fantastic, if I do say so myself

In all honestly here, I really loved the book. Towards the end of the story, the grammar got worse, and there weren’t as many commas, or quotation marks. However the story itself was beautiful, fantastically written, with wonderful detail, and perfect dialogue. All in all, one of my ABSOLUTE FAVORITE stories. Thank you!

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Fantastic, wishing for more

So, a little confusing at the start, but as time went on it became better and better. I love the detail, and I love the way you write 2 or more POVs. I think the way you show your work and the way you displayed the characters feelings were perfect. Thank you!
P.S hoping for more :)

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Wonderful Read

I absolutely loved it. The story felt so real, like I was living in it, and just experiencing everything right in front of me. All in all, perfect and well written. Good job.

Ty.

-mian

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Almost as good as the first

It could use some Grammar improvements, and i was kinda hoping to see more of Anne in this story, but pretty good. It was not as good as your last one, and some of the grammar needed a bit of editing . Still a wonderful story though. Thanks,

-m c

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Absolutely fantastic

It was beautiful. The details were described perfectly, and while some of the grammar could have been changed, it was still perfect. It was kind, and a nicely written HP fanfic. Not too much detail, but not too little,and the characters had cool, even personas. All in all, it’s a beautiful book. I feel the cover could have been more, matching, to the book, but at this point, it’s all about the words.

Thank you,

-m c

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Pretty awesome

Hello,
So like every other book, there are grammar mistakes. You can’t be perfect. But there were BARELY ANY but I had to give the review that my brother wanted so, here I am, writing it for him. He says you have a lovely writing style (his words, not mine) and that he loves the plot twists and turns. Ahhhh. He should writie this himself. Bye! (But still srsly good book here. Will recommend to other ppl).

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Pretty good

Hello,

Needs a little work on grammar, and is a bit confusing on chapter 8. However this is very good and a fantastic read. I would recommend to just about anyone.

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Perfect in every way

I really like the plot, but the story is a little confusing. Like, is Dalton dead? Who is the red wolf? What color is Oberon’s wolf? I think you could use an editor, or someone to check over your work, because there are some mistakes. However this is one of the BEST stories I have ever read. I think you should get it published, and from all the good reveiws you’ve gotten, I think you could. I really like, and if you ever need anyone to edit your story, let me know, I would be happy to edit such a great story.

-mian

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Good, soo good.

I think it is very good. I do want to see it published one day. However, it might need a little editing. Sometimes (I don’t mean to be rude, mean, offensive) your commas are in the wrong place, also I’ve seen you use you’re instead of your, and there instead of their. These are mistakes and that’s okay, just wanted you to know. But all on all, love your style, love the plot, love Lori and Shawn, and I hate Willamoana (get it? Coz she whines so much). So, overall, great story. P.S. Your story is already a success in my book (hehe that wasn’t meant to be a pun), and one day I hope to see it published. Good job!!

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