Mike199

Trying to destroy the world didn't work out, so I'm writing now.

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Forced

Too short. The way the story was progressing, you could have easily added another 6-8 chapters and created an even bigger world. Plus, I'd have liked to see more dialogue doing the describing than just the narration. Otherwise, this was a nice story. The main character is compelling, you did a fantastic job relaying the harshness of her world, and you can paint a pretty picture with words. I never had problems reading the story and imagining what type of world these people dwell in.

Very well done. Some more chapters, and a few less run-on paragraphs, you could have a killer full sized novel on your hands

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50 Days review

The grammatical errors irked me, but the pace was crisp, and the writing style was simple and engaging. Some of the decision making from characters was iffy. Overall, pretty solid effort.

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