Awesome world and plot!
The writer has beautiful descriptive language that make it very clear to envision the scenery. Also, I just love how well the world is gradually built as we learn more about it. The plot immediately had me hooked, especially since I'm a sucker for stories involving controlling elements. I like how it's a complicated world but an easy-to-follow story. The only thing I think could improve is the writing style, and I think it will make a big difference to remove a few adjectives. Even though I loved how nice and clear it was while reading, sometimes it came off a little off-putting, especially in the casual and higher-tension scenarios. I recommend you try to, instead of placing the adjectives in the middle of a phrase, giving them an entirely new sentence where you can focus on them and make them seem more fluid and natural. Other than that, it was super interesting and I devoured it! I love the plot and the descriptive language and scenery are to die for. I have a clear picture of all the characters and their personalities in my head... just perfect.
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