ℳ𝓎𝓈𝓉𝒾𝒸 𝒲𝓇𝒾𝓉ℯ𝓇

FINALLY A GOOD WEREWOLF STORY!

I have personally read a lot of werewolf novels and story’s around folk tales to werewolf stories. Most lacked personality and character development while others seemed to be childish fantasy. You novel however reminds me that they are still some great werewolf stories out there, Lily is a sweet driven girl who I absolutely adore not to mention the story plot you had around her was amazing.

I couldn’t have asked fo a better werewolf novel, as the grammar and style of you writing was also very developed and good! God I’m still so amazed, I have worthy competition out there and I highly respect you for your work.

Great good!

Poetic

You write very poetically. It’s beautiful, to say the least. It’s very interesting and traps in focus to areas or illusion that might not be seen with a naked eye and that is something I adore when it comes to writing.

The reading was smooth and graceful but watch how you use your poetic tongue. Some of the illustrations and illusions presented contradict some of the events in the story. Either way despite that drawback it’s such a beautiful story. I am at a loss for words when it comes to the elegance you have brought forth.

Great job.

The dog

I start off with a pro that I like the fact that the setting of this novel is out of the usual settings used by authors. It was a refreshing read as I don’t usually see novels like this and I also like how the names are very uncommon its new and I like it. But one part that gets me was the summary. You basically told the whole novel so what is the point of reading any further? You need to leave room for mystery so it call pull you reader in to help you audience get interested within the novel. Do that and I think you will have a much better start to the book you have.

Also saw a couple grammar errors so try and go through and fix them but other than that good job.

Also the cover is copyrighted which is illegal so I recommend changing it.

Great Story!!

Such a delightful 💕 story! Loved it the moment I stated to read it!

Keep up the good work! 🤘🏾

The Girl and The Player

I'm sorry but this book lacked interest for me as a reader and a fellow writer. Yes, I will admit I am more of a fantasy reader but I think all genres have the potential to be great and have their own way of adding spice to the pot. Writing is like cooking and you have to do the best with the ingredients you have. As you become more experienced, your dishes will become more complex and flavorful with the abundant amount of ingredients you have and the skills you use to make those recipes.

In my opinion, you stroy just stated facts, there was no real storyline for me personally. You fell short in detail along with descriptions of settings and people. No to mention the grammar was off but Grammarly can help you out with that or just prove read and ask a friend. The "Third POV" could have added so much to this and made it more interesting but the delivery of that just wasn't there along with grammar but props for the spelling!

I can tell you grammar is a pain to get right. Hell, I still have issues with it myself.

But don't let what I say define you as a writer, you just have to work harder and I believe you can come back from this, I don't say it to rude or put you down but I say it as a way to wish for your improvement.

Not all feedback is good feedback. Not every review will put a smile on your face. I'm not here to discourage you or shame you. I want you to be better and I know you can make your dreams reality.

Good

This story is sweet, simple and to the point in my opinion. I would use more details and paragraphs in the story but over all this is good work!

Chapter 2? Please?

I can't help but feel a little envious of your novel so far as I am too a werewolf writer. Your story is so smooth and constantly alluring I honestly can't get enough. This is amazing and you have a talent for writing fantasy. I have to be wary of you because I can see your gonna make it big. The details and grammar are shell shocking and are amazing, not to mention the characters are decently described.

KEEP WRITING! YOUR GOING TO DO GREAT THINGS!

Nice

Over the story was good just try to make it more detailed and give more information of the story. But i love the story, and the story it has to tell but you could use more work or building up the story and feelings and emotion wise

Good plot

I like the plot idea you have here. it is very nice and the is truly interesting. by far the plot is the best thing about the novel but your plot is used very poorly and in a general sense the story makes no sense. you jump around from so many idea and concepts you don't hold any solid ideas. try focusing your thoughts more and expounding on them in greater detail as we don't even know what the main character looks like not to mention the building she is living in. also when you reference the curse is it power or actual devastation? when the ‘curse’ warms her body heat is more of a helper than a downfall so to have it helping her is very confusing in a way and it just doesn’t flow into the novel properly.

work on details writing and not just thinking and writing whatever comes into your head down. make it a novel and not seem far fetched idea. make the characters seem life and not one dimensional.

Heart Wrenching

My god when I first read it I was completely speechless. I didn't expect the first chapter to have such an uproar of mixed emotions. I love the way you have established heartbreak into the novel and so much more. To the point which I am in tears. I felt the emotion and I felt the pain and anguish. Such simple words to describe such complex feelings and actions. My God, I have nothing to say to you, only that this work is glorious. Truly glorious. This is a true work of art and I believe every story should have the emotions you have brought forth. Dam what a story this will be. You have me hooked and it is only the first chapter.

Fabulous work, I can not wait to read more. A pure work of art.

Good

I am not knowledgeable when it comes to transcripts but based on what I do know. I wish there were more details within the story. Sure you not going to go into depth and mean as a novel would but at the same time, I can’t imagine anything within this story. Not even the full details of the dragon and more. But either way, I like the plot concept you have for this novel. I generally like writings about times with King, Queens, and castles. Also mixed in with a little bit a drama.

Your characters are well kept but work on developing them more as people. Other than that good transcript.

Unique

I am not going to lie, I thought it was going to be a typical alpha story but you managed to add something different with her past and how it relates to her dad and her mate. I love the way she refuses him and is somewhat different from the other werewolf novels but what she falls for him kinda easily after that I kind of dislike it. Love should be something that takes a lot of time in my opinion but either way, you have done an excellent job.

You pulled away from the original theme and I can honestly say I’m surprised and happy.

Keep up the good work, a few grammar issues, and typos but other than that it was a good story.

The Great Ones

I have been reading and reviewing for a very long time. And never in my whole writing career have I come across a story with such raw and unique potential. I adore your characters, I love the plot, and the story itself is a true work of art. Usually, only read a couple of chapters of each story but no, this story is so much more. It holds so much drama and development within the characters. These people you have created aren’t two dimensional, there ARE people with their network of feelings and emotions. They are people with issues to solve and reinvent themselves for the better.

Lady Juniper, well. I will admit I dislike the way she lets men control her life but I had to remember that this was normal at her time and she was never taught to defend herself properly. She was never made to be a lady but a slave to which every husband her father chooses. That fr me was a very hard subject for me to swallow, I guess my own. Pride was in the way of me liking Juniper more but either way, as I continue reading I cant wait to see what woman she will become in the future.

Now for the Vasaath. He too was a very interesting character that I adore and hold over Lady Juniper. He is strong independent but he cannot show emotion. They both are. He is the type of man that I could depend on but it's a little frustrating how he isn't able to tell Lady Juniper how he feels lol. The treacherous cycle of love never stops to amaze me no neither does this novel. I can't wait to finish it and I cant wait to read book two.

The Window

You had a good plot but at the same time, it lacked so much detail and imagery within the novel. Your characters are very one-dimensional not to mention there wasn’t any sign of realism at all. Meeting a stranger and driving you home and then becoming best friends and trusting her instantly? That's not in the slightest realistic if I was betrayed by my best friend I wouldn't trust anyone especially a stranger. Also how her best friend and boyfriend were hooking up the day of her birthday when they knew he was picking her up? That’s risky and honestly, if I was cheating I wouldn’t be that careless let alone be having sex in a parking lot LOUDLY where people can see and where I was most likely to get caught.

Overall my opinion of this novel is not that high in the slightest. The only credit I can give you here is the fact that I liked how the plot was going so far, other than that, it wasn't one of my favoru=ite stories to read I'm sorry.

I hope to see you improve and see better work in the future.

Magnolia

I like your plot as it is unique. Most romance novels go by a pattern I strongly dislike so to read something different in a sense was nice. My only issue is that you don’t have a unique writing style and the gramar along with details within the story could be a lot better. You also had a styriotypical summary but a unique in a way plot so it kinda makes the chemistry of the story unbalance in a way. But thats just my opionion. My note ot you is dont write to tell a story, write to be in the story , write because you love to do so not because it might seem fun to you. Write due to the fact that you love you charaters and you want to see them develope into people.

I want to see imporvement beause I can tell you keen on making the novel as great as I know it can be.

Alone

I like the novel but I feel like it lacks in detail and character development. I don't know how Amber feels I don’t know how she sees certain situations I can not make an accurate guess as to who she is as a person or character. Not to mention most of the novel is speaking parts which is fine and all but they get jumbled up and it makes it hard to tell who is talking to who. Not to also mention how is the person feeling when they are speaking? What is going on in Ambers head when she hear’s about the trip, how does she feel when she only sees her mother 2 to 3 times a year? I wouldn’t be happy I would miss her dearly and I e excited to see her again or something along those lines. I feel like you should add these detail because they make the biggest difference. I also did find a lot of grammar issue but those are easy fixes.

Put effort into this story and I know it would do so much good.

Dramatically Inspiring

The over all sorry holds a medieval represetation that I personally love in fantasy novels and Tv shows. The way you stripped the vocabulary into something raw and profound amazed me as I could soak in every single detail of the story. The summary by far was my favorite along with the first chapter. They pulled me straight into the world of death and mystery that I adore even more.

Your writing style is some complex and raw that u couldn’t help the fact that I could read more as I was in a trace. The story’s plot was well illustrated in chapter 2 but chapter ones imagery takes the cake. You have done such a good job with this novel and I cannot wait to read more from you.

And sense I was so involved with your story I would like you permission to make a episode about it on my podcast.

Werewolf Original

This werewolf novel reminds me of an older version as to how people use to write werewolf fiction. Talking wolves and so on, which I’m not against. Just when the wolves are speaking try to use a different font to tel the reader this conversation is basically going on inside their head. Other than that you story lacked in detail, imagery, and descriptive emotions and plots that the characters were trying to portray. It fell short and lacked the flavor of detail and spice as to me it was a typical werewolf story.

I know you want to go outside of that box so encourage you to be a little more imaginative and to add a little spice into the story. I’m not saying this to make you feel bad as I want to see you improve. You have a talent for writing and your grammar was great. But then again these are just my opinions, its up to you on how you want to move forward with this novel.

Wow!

I like the relationships you developed here and ngl the main character is a woman achiever and that's inspirational. That's probably the best part if the novel includimg the writing stype and details you have added!

Great job!

Sorry for the late review 😅

McHottie

Absolutely adorable! Not only was this book fun to read it also had a great sense of humor which readers including myself love! And I like it how you describe her condition with her anxiety, its relatable and I think you just about nailed it, but I would add more detail as to why she was freaking out. The visualisation was a little hard to follow but I think you did a great job writting it.

Zoe is cute and shy which I can vibe with but her outfit choice(even though I 100% support the sexy jumpsuit) doesn't match her personality. She has anxiety which makes it hard for her to be in open place with a lot of people and if you add that I think it would the cream on the cake!

But thats just my opinion and it's you novel, anyway you choice to write it is fine because you have a great story!

Keep up the talented work!

Grey or Blue? Which to choose 😁

You sorry was amazing, and I really did enjoy the read. The way your described your characters was cute and very well put as I can already get a feel for them and thats what makes a good story!

Not to mention you cover is so well illustrated and mature it brings the story itself into a whole new light. However I would recommend taking out those commas after every speaking line. They aren't necessary and are a little distracting but other than that you got a great story and and even brighter future!

Keep up the good work, for you are talented.

Great Story!!

Such a delightful 💕 story! Loved it the moment I stated to read it!

Keep up the good work! 🤘🏾

Wonderful

I love your writing style! It's very illusive and captivating. Only thing I find hard to follow is where the story is taking place, it gets a little bit confusing because you don't give accurate descriptions of the setting and what they are doing. So work on organizing you thoughts but that aside you gramar is great!

Sorry it took so long to review, please dont forget to do mines aswell 🧡

Sexy and Gay? Love it 🧡🔥

I love you descriptions of the characters and how smooth of a read it is! The anticipation after every chapter is just what a good story needs not to mention your novel is spicy as hell and I love it.

Each description you use is so bold and well defined and it just brings the LGBTQ+ into a new light that im sure everyone will appreciate.

Keep up the great work! Can't wait for the next chapter, and also the only downside is how short the chapters are. Aim to make them a little longer if you wouldn't mind.

Cute Little Story

It was a cute little story and wasn't bad at all. The summary was good, work on punctuation and gramar and if you do that then your golden.

Also add more descriptions to your Characters and settings.

To me personally the stroy itself didn't make sense but I still enjoyed the read!

Hope this doesn't impair your review on my book.

🤗🤗🤗

Disguise

The summary was so good, to me personally, the storyline didn't match that energy and the dish fell flat and lacked flavor. To me, writing is like a recipe and you didn't yet have the right ingredients to make the story and that's ok! No one except you to write Shakespeare in one day lol. I can see you worked hard and I commend your efforts, it just needs a little more elbow grease.

How you introduced the character at the beginning of the story fell short, you don't have to state everything like its a fact, add some type of creativity that the readers can enjoy and relate to. Now don't get me wrong I like your main character but you stated that she was raped and abuse. She didn't show any signs to me like she was abused or harassed.

Seeing is believing in my case but don't let this review get you down, you have so much potential as a writer and I know your work will make someone's day a brighter one. You just need more ingredients in your arsenal and I can promise you this story can be golden and maybe even surpass your limits as a writer.

I hope this helps you and doesn't discourage you.

A Prince? Say no more!

Your writing style includes a lot of illustrations of the mind which I absolutely adore just make sure you don't add too much. The plot is cooked to perfection with every spice used to its upmost potential! Writing is like cooking and so far you have one hell of a recipe.

Keep it up! You have a fan here and I will continue to read you book in my spear time.

Ha, like you could stop me from reading this delicious story

Cute

I like this story, it cute and simple with sweet characters and very good descriptions of all their relationships. But note not to rush information, give a little at a time.

Highly recommend!

I have no doupt this story will make it big one day. It was such a delightful read and the characters are so cute i can't help but fall in love.

Paragraphs was the only issue for me, but other than that, its an amazing read and story.

Well you got me Entranced!

I love the way you flipped the myth of the sirens in your own amazing way. I also get hints that you read some werewolf novels by the way you describe Sirens 'inner beast' but who knows. I'm a fellow werewolf writer and I just happen to see those hints, don't know if you meant to do that but either way, this is some really impressive work! Every description of the sirens and bloodshed was marvelous! Of course, a few grammar issues here and there but even the best writers mess things up.

You should feel really proud of this story and I hope you continue to writer and improve, you deserve it!

Congratulations on how you executed the story and how you were able to draw in the reader with every single sentence!

Best of luck! I know your gonna make it!

Marvelously Delicious 😋

Wow, wow, and wow! This book is a ironic blend of fantasy and fiction! I have read a lot of devils novels, stories and folklore along with their encounters, but it lacked the resolve and favor I was looking for, it didn't settle well and was majorly rushed. They didnt season the chicken, and baked it for half its time.

But you... oh God the flavor in this story was immaculent, and jucy! Writting is like a recipe and you clearly made a dish of writing so worth while and entertaining! You story is flourished with so many spices and fruits all cooked to perfection!

I envy you, your creativity for writing is amazing not to mention your writing style is well balanced.

You honestly deserve a metal for bringing back flavor into the devil writing world! I started to give up on devil novels until this story. You have truly opened up my world and I hope you continue to do so in the future.

Tribes at its best

WOW WOW, oh and also WOW. I honestly don't know what to make of you book, it said its a drama but I never read a drama story like this before. Its so captivating and primal it pulls you in and never let's go.

You writing style is simple yeah it gives loads of information at one time, its a true work of art.

I hope this gets published one day!

Imaginary Friend

All I have to say is wow, I don't have many words for this story.

It's really good!

I do want to see more detail describing Sally and Tyler but other than that this is such an adorable story! Not to mention kinda sad, but the sadness and mystery make it all the while of reading. So many questions pop in my head and I'm dying to know the conclusion! Please keep writing you have a great story in your position, use it to the best of your ability!

Broken Princess

The general idea and motivation you have for this story is astonishing and I like the way you use and describe your characters. It just goes to show how much of an amazing writer you will be and the mass amount of potential you have. I am already very fond of this story and I wish to continue reading it, even though it is not things I usually read. I wish your story the best of luck this world has to offer! Continue writing I would love to see your books published one of these days.

Best of luck!

The chosen one

They characters in the story are cool and it bring a different type of illustration to the the world! This book is most likely one of the most interesting books I have ever had a pleasure of reading.

Needs Work

Starting with your summary, to me personally as I can't speak for everyone else on Inkitt, it was very dull and lack interest for me. It didn't get me motivated to read the novel at all and if you add a little spice to it I feel like you can bring this story together. Sure a short story about friends is nice and all but it's not an attention grabber and it doesn’t keep readers interested. You need to add drama or some sort of plot that works against what the main characters are trying to establish. You need a protagonist and an antagonist to help move the novel along and you lack both of these things. Work on making a constructive plot, maybe they are trying to find out who killed a friend at the school, maybe they all secretly hate one another but have to stay together to keep a secret, these are just some examples you can use for the future who knows. Aside from that, you need to develop some type of plot.

Furthermore you cant add emojis in place of descriptive details. You're supposed to be able to write about facial expressions rather than using a text symbol for them. The more detailed you can write, the better your characters. The audience needs to be able to see and feel your characters, the characters you made in this story don't even seem like people to me. I can’t imagine what they look like, I can’t get any idea of how they might act, dress, conversate, nothing. Make them into people

Lastly, your rushing every scene and have poor formating for each part. Your writing is all over the place and is very odd. You don't have a writing style as I feel like your writing the first thing that comes out of your head without thinking about how it looks on paper not to also mention your grammar isn't the best either.

Work on your skills as a writer and develop your stories better is all the advice I can give to you. I am not here to hurt you as this is just my opinion and my opinion alone. Others might love the way you have written this story, and they could be right while I am completely wrong. Who knows, all I know is that this story wasn’t my cup of tea but it might be someone elses.

Despite my review, work hard and get better.

I'm Lost

I like the plot you have for the story but it was poorly executed. I'm sorry this story could have been great but the gramar and the relationship to the characters weren't clear. You keep using the title Alpha when its not necessary also the POV are extremely hard to follow in my opinion. You switch them so casually I can't tell who I'm reading about anymore.

But even with all that, I can say the plot was the best part of this story by far and its the only thing that has been keeping me going.

Work on organizing your thoughts and characters and this story can be gold.