The story starts off in a dynamic, aggressive, energetic way. And it continues to be that way throughout. It moves very fast and keeps the reader attentive and interested. If you want to read something forceful and thrilling, with a touch of danger to it, this is the right story for you. You would not regret it. I love how the story moves fast; everything is exciting, happening all of a sudden: finding the wristband and fighting something Jack did not even know existed until then. I have really enjoyed reading this; it came to me as a relaxation reading material. I would love to read more soon. You could work a bit on your writing style, edit and proofread the story. But, your idea is great!
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