A little unexpected
When I first started reading this, I was actually expecting Chris to be a killer on the lookout for a new victim and the story would end with him getting a potential victim and it did look like that at first. However I was pleasantly surprised to see that it didn't turn out that way and he ended up getting punished for a previous crime.
Overall, I enjoyed reading this. By the way Chris was described he seemed like your average womanizer but this was turned a little sour when the ninja alluded to her employer and her purpose for being at the party. Your descriptions of the characters and their surroundings make it easy to visualize what they look like and is going on as well.
Engaging and Emotional
Right from the start you had my attention. You portray the anguish of Moses quite well which allows a reader to be able to feel his pain at having to bring down the wrath of God on the Egyptians. The pacing and writing style is done beautifully as well
Overall, a fine piece of writing that does the film and Biblical story justice..
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