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The Book of Trials

A wonderfully written book, with a thrilling plot and a great protagonist. The writing is amazing, giving readers a clear image of the settings and characters. I personally loved the protagonist, Veia - she's relatable, full of personality, and carries a sense of depth that grabbed my attention from chapter one. I really enjoyed this, and can’t wait to see more from this author!

Suspenseful and Intriguing

I really enjoyed this! The sense of suspense and mystery kept me hooked with every new story. As far as critique goes, I noticed a few grammar mistakes, and thought that writing could be a bit more fleshed out. Some of the scenes and explanations felt a bit vague, but that also added a sense of mystery to them, so it's perfectly fine. All in all, some really great short stories, filled with horror and suspense.

A Really Interesting Novella

A really solid story! The writing was very rich, and the universe was really interesting and developed. If I had to make a suggestion, it would be to consider doing a quick round of editing, maybe focussing on the sentence structure? I felt that a few of the sentences ended a bit abruptly. This didn’t take away from the story's quality, though, so it's not a big deal.

Very promising!

So far, this book is great. I particularly like the struggles of the individual characters. The entire cast, including side characters, are filled with personality and charm. I also love how the plot slowly unfolds with an overall sense of mystery.

It seemed to me that the main characters often acted a bit too mature for their ages - maybe you could make them a tad older? It's not a huge issue, just something I noticed.

Just a quick suggestion: You might want to put a trigger/content warning in your summary, regarding the events of chapter 4 - some people might find that kind of thing upsetting.

Great work! I'm excited to see what comes next.

Humatua: Island of Monsters

A very unique and interesting fantasy story with a great sense of adventure. I personally enjoyed the villains; they were unique and threatening. The writing, especially during action scenes and descriptions, was smooth and rich.
As for suggestions, I'd recommend polishing some of the dialogue and possibly revisiting the dialogue tags (Lualu, "....."). Other than this, though, and a few grammatical errors, everything was solid.
Overall, a captivating story with great characters and a colorful, fascinating world.

Gripping, Emotional, and Rich

"The Requiem" is a compelling novel, with a gripping plot and engaging protagonist. I love how emotionally driven the writing is. Cassia's character is deep, relatable, and altogether great. The world the novel is set in is fascinating – I love how the writing gives bits of information about it, allowing readers to piece things together themselves.

As far as critique goes, I felt that some of the chapters were a bit long, and noticed a few typos. These are just technical issues, though – the actual content of the book is great.

Overall, a gripping read, filled with emotion and action. I'd definitely recommend it!

A Tense and Exciting Short Story

This is an amazing short story, Tension is held until the final sentence as readers slowly learn the plot. The author gave enough information to guide readers in the right direction while leaving some things to the imagination. I’m amazed at how there managed to be actual character development in such a short piece. The woman's inner turmoil about her actions is particularly well done.

All in all, this is a great story with amazing writing, intriguing characters, and a gasp-worthy ending.