Paola Vázquez Droz

Progress

It is not a bad story and I'm sure that when it's finalized and revised it will gain a lot of audiences. Keep up the good work!

In Love

OMG, I don't care how hot he is, I HATE RHYS. You wrote him so perfectly toxic that there is no room in me to like him. I hope I can see more of Will on the 3rd book and I'm praying that he and Kelly can be marked again. Love your writing!

Nice start

The story has a really strong start and beckons you to keep reading. Although it only has one chapter for now, I'm positive that the story line will be entertaining and addictive. Good job!

Difficult

I recommend moving the glossary to the beginning of the story, it makes the reading less difficult. Still, I'm not completely sure if the principal character is a wolf or an elf-like glossary suggests. There are many grammatical errors that make the reading a bit hard to understand. But the concept behind the story, the idea of it, it is an interesting one.

Nice!

Nicely written and I learned about places I had never heard of before. This story is a nicely peek into a different culture using fiction and prose.

Amazing!

Simply and irrevocably amazing. Your writing style and the events of the story kept me hooked. I can't wait to see what happens next.

Promising

The story holds promise. The plot can be expanded and the characters can be more rounded. The setting, as well as the grammar needs help. But after editing I know it can be a more rounded, better written short story.

Promising

The story holds great promise. There are a few grammatical errors that once fixed the story will flow even better. The plot needs a tiny little bit of work, but nothing major. Overall is a nice story to read and I'm looking forward to see where it leads.

Interesting

I really liked it, but would have enjoyed it more if the plot was more extensive. But overall, really good job.

Work

The story seems promising but the many errors in grammar and sometimes uncorrelated mistakes make the story difficult to read and understand. Hopefully, after the story is finished and edited, it will be greatly enjoyable.

Not bad

It's not a bad story. The plot is solid, but I understand that English is not your first language, so an editor will be needed. But it's still a good story.

Nice

I like it. It's thrilling and the characters are well-formed. Good job!

Liked it

I really enjoyed the descriptions. They felt sort of poetic and erotic at the same time. Not a bad job!

Potential

The story doesn't have a bad start, but there are some important details that should be addressed. Setting descriptions would be good to help the reader picture the scene. Character details like age and physical descriptions would be another plus. The story has the potential, it just needs a bit of tunning in order to flow smoothly.

Easy Read

The story and plot are well built, but the grammar takes away a bit of the reading. Overall, if you like fantasy stories, you will enjoy this tale.

Good

Good story with well rounded characters. Definitely worth the read.

Nice

It is an interesting story. The grammar mistakes take away a bit of the writing, still the message it's there.

Great

Great story with relatable concepts. The writer makes us immerse and relate to the main character through her thoughts and actions. Good work!

Love it!

Omg, I love it! It is spectacularly written and leaves me craving more and more.

Good

I like the character witness and ability to narrate serious scenes with humor and prose. Just becausd of that fact, the story is throughly enjoyable and fun to read. I love how the scenes are shaped and the story is developed. Overall, I fully recommend the book.

Dark Valley High

The story is perfect. The characters are well rounded, everything has details that make you set the scene and mood in your head. I love it!

Interesting beginning

Just four chapters in, but the story is vivacious and captivating. Max is an incredibly interesting character that pulls in the reader to see and feel all that he does. Can't wait for the rest of the story to see what happens to Max and the rest of his companions.

Promising

And interesting begging that begs to discover more about the character. The main character has so many challenges to face already and she hasn't even seen what it is to come. I love it!

Thrilling

Amazing story! I felt the character's up and downs with each page-turning. The apocalyptic future was horrifying and imaginable, which made the story the more thrilling. What I do say is, that I want to know what happens next. The story left me wanting for more and I can't wait to read what happens to Ray and Josiah. Great job, author!

Great!

Love it! The story is well written and the words transport me to the scene. The relationships are relatable and believable. What I enjoy the most is the involvement of the supernatural world with the modern one. This is not your typical fantasy story. Beautiful!

Beautiful

This story is amazing. Everything is so logical and believable that I truly wish I was part of the story. It is an amazing writing.

Better

It has an interesting beginning and concept, but it needs a bit of polishing.

Interesting

The story is very nicely written even if it's not done yet. The intimate scenes are well done and make the imagination fly. Overall not a bad story to explore.

Sexy

Not bad at all, although I would have liked to see more background and description for certain characters. Still, the shots are sexy and arousing as hell.

Terrifying

Terrifying! I never thought a baby could be so infernal. Can't wait to read what happens next and find out the reason they are both in a sewer.

Romance

A very cute and down to earth romatic story. It is not quite finished yet, but I can tell that the end is going to be epic. Good job!

Terrifying

Loved it. Every single minute of it. I empathized with the character and felt the apprehension of hurting an animal. The descriptions were magnificent and I felt like I did not only empathized with Dan but that I was him in the middle of a deserted road. This was just...terrifyingly amazing.

Impressed

It is very well written and as always, I never expect the outcome. I'm looking forward to reading more stories from you. Nice job!

Potential

Not a bad story, but it will definitely be an easier read once the grammar gets corrected. Good job!

Not bad

Well written. Interesting plot. An easy read. Nice job!

Terrifying

The terror is palpable. I was at the edge of my seat the whole way. I can't believe how the story unraveled. An amazing job by an amazing author. Great job!

Original

I know it is a completely different story, but sure as Hell gives me Sabrina (the Netflix series) vibes. It is beautifully written and compelles the reader to know what happens next. Good job!

Interesting

It's an interesting perspective what you claimed on the prologue. It lays the base for the rest of the story. Not a bad idea. It would definitely be a more easier read once the grammar has been edited.

Cute

Very cute and unexpected. The grammar needs some work, though. Besides that it is an enjoyable story.

Amazing

This story is extremely good and is not even completed yet. The writing style and plot has me at the edge of my seat. Can't wait to see what happens next!

Nice.

Not bad at all. It would have been a vit easier to read if some grammar was fixed, but vesides that was an entertaining story.

Polemic

Beautiful story but it does have a very disturbing beginning. Still, it beckons the reader yo keep at it and see where it leads. Can't wait to see what happens next!

Interesting

Bloody just how I like it. The narrative style felt like a nicely written prose and kept me hooked. Overall a very good job.

High Potential

In love. I enjoy a good written book about fantasy creatures. Can't wait to see how it all ends.

Wolves

I enjoy you writing style. How the character speaks to the audience is something different but refreshing as well. I also love all stories that have to deal with wolves, so you won me over. Good job!

Tribid

This is the first tribid story I have read and I must say thag I have fallen in love with it. Grammatical errors aside, you have made an amazing writing. Good job!

Impressive

The effort you took to do your research about the 19th century slang words and how to incorporate them in the narrative is inciting. The bloody images at the beginning also pull in the reader and makes them want to know more, (they certainly worked on me). Overall a very nicely written story and I'm looking forward to seeing more of it.
Good luck!

Thoughts

I feel for the protagonist. She was severely bullied in the beginning and it took great strength to overcome it. After the story is edited I know it will be even better that it already is. Good luck!

Endangered

The story has a few grammatical errors in some of the chapters. I found that the use of metaphors and imagery helps in some circumstances, but having to many too often, takes a bit of the writing away. One mistake I noticed, in the beginning, is that when the characters reached the lake, Jay smelled the salty water, but lakes are made of freshwater. It is not an important detail but is something that I noticed.
Besides that, I found this story to be different. I'm used to reading about werewolves and vampires being the good guys, when here that is not the case. Also, the protagonist has such a tragic and scarred past, that I understand the quick acceptance of this fantasy world she has been thrown into. What I did not expect were the arousing and affectionate emotions the prince brought to her because not too long ago she was being raped. That- in my opinion, it does not mean that you should change it- wasn't expected.

Good.

A very good start. Can't wait to see what happens next.

Good concept

The story has a good concept, but I feel that in some chapters the story turns confusing. I would have liked that the time in which it takes place would have been clearly stated in the beginning. I found that in some chapters the story gives the idea of being taken place in a medieval time, but in others I saw parallels with modern concepts. Aside from that, I think the story has great potential.

Potential

The story has a great potential and I am sure that when is heavily edited for grammatical mistakes it will be amazing. I can't say that I sympathize at any point with Elijah, but aside from that it is a good story.

Better

The story is much more clearer than the first draft. Even if there are still some confusing grammatical errors that hinder the reading experience, the story has a comfortable flow. There are more character descriptions and scenes clearly depicted. I can't wait to see what happens next.
Good luck!

Promising

The story is interesting and intriguing. It has a marvelous unique touch, as I've told you before, being a wolf sotry with African American plus a Hispanic. That fact makes me enjoy it even more being a Latina myself. Furthermore, there are some minimal grammatical errors that if fixed, will make the story flow even better.
Keep up the amazing work and good luck!

High potential

The story is amazing and this is only the beginning. The plot is developed nicely and the sotry hooks the reader on without difficulty. The are minimal grammar errors, but they don't make the reading difficult. Overall, I'm looking forward to what comes next.
Good luck!

Surprised

This story was a huge surprise to me. I really didn't expect to be reading a guy-on-guy book. I've always preferred lesbian erotica (even if I'm not a lesbian). But I can say that I really enjoyed the few erotica scenes in the book.
Also, I never would had imagined that there was going to be incest. Yes, the blurb said about it, but I never expected it. The incest was midly disturbing, but it gave the story a twist all in itself.
It is not heavily baldly written, but there are some grammatical errors that once fixed it will make the reading a lot easier.
Overall, I actually enjoyed the story and can't wait to read more from you.
Good luck!

Interesting

I really like the story so far. It is a great mixture of action and fantasy. I'm really looking forward what comes next.

Potential

I like the story so far, there are a few grammatical errors but they can be fixed easily. What has me confused is the fact that you mention a pack, but don't mention any wolves. It has me intrigued to know what happens next.

Potential

This story has potential. Some parts read as they come from a videogame but is not that bad. the grammar needs a bit of help as well ad the development of the plot. Still, I feel like this can be made into a great story.

Good start

The book has a pretty good start, but the writing needs a bit of work. Keep it up though 👌

Rare

The story has a good plot so far. I'm eager to know where it leads. The writing could use some work, but is very minimal. Best of luck!

Amazing

It's truly magical. I just wish I had half the talent you have. Live it!

Thoughts

This was not what I expected when I read the title. It is very different from other writings I've read where there's a Master and Submissive. Still, I find myself enjoying the story.

Creepypasta

I'm liking the story, but is different. The writer is always speaking to the audience, the character seems to know that he has an audience.