PapillonDeNuit

OMGWTF

When I started reading I expected this story to be much less...well written. However, it gets better and better as it goes on and I enjoyed the ending. The beginning to me was a bit unclear because I was confused as to where the character was. I read the whole thing with a huge pit in my stomach and a looming feeling of absolute fucking dread and I think that was exactly what you were going for. In my view, the feeling you get from a story is the most important part and as long as a feeling is established, the other aspects of the story are almost insignificant. I am an unexperienced writer but a very experienced reader and I have little complaints in regard to this story. Good job.