PixiesandDust

Amazing!!

Your descriptions and language is beautiful! I love the story line. The characters are all very intersting and I'm surious to see what happens, you're an excellent writer, I love your writing style.

Interesting

I love the humour and the characters, the story has a lot of potential. I know it's written in 1st person, but it felt like every dialogue had a tag and it read as very "I did this" "I said that". Maybe adding a bit more variety to speech tags and more description as to the environment and what's going on would make it flow better and add a lot more depth to the story and make the story more engaging.
It's very interesting and a great story idea! Excited to see where it goes.

Loooveee

I love your writing style! The descriptions are so good and I love the characters. It was so easy to fall in love with them. The story flow is well done and I'm excited to keep reading. A few spelling/grammar issues, but otherwise it's a beautiful and intriguing story.

Cute

I really like your main character, she's got that sweet side, but is also tough. It makes her come across as both cute and daring.
The story line feels as if it's lacking direction a little bit, it would be cool to see some more build up to dramatic scenes or problems that she may face in her home life/school life.
I like your writing style, you use some really dynamic speech tags and desciptive language! Keep it up, your doing really good!

Dramaaaa!

Loved how you threw us straight into the drama and the action. The characters are lovable, intriguing, and I can't wait to finish it. Little critique to check your tenses, but other than that it's a really well written story.

Cute!

This is an engaging story and the characters are already tugging at my heart! Super cute, and I'm excited to see what happens next.