Robynn Gabel

Wyoming

Retired jack-of-all-trades. Has worked in many fields including medical and management. Owner of movie theatres and is working on becoming a published author.

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Good Job

A little rough in the beginning but then the story begins to unfold nicely. Catie comes across as a strong character. Mac, her father, is definitely the military type with a guarded heart. Having been a Stargate fan, I recognized some of the main characters and enjoyed the author's portrayal. Good descriptions, story flowed well and kept my interest.

There are a few misspelled words and incorrect sentence structure. Yet, it doesn't detract from the plot which is clear. Nice job of building suspense. Especially like the lively interaction between father and daughter.

Needs a little editing, but outside of that, interesting.

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