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Hello. Hi. Call me Ross. Just a dose of me can help. P.S. I am still new here so I maybe writing trash 🗿

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Forget Me Not

A quick note: this review would be a long one, so brace yourselves.
Anyway, let's get started!

Firstly, the plot has an interesting flow and it's not predictable. Based off of the previous comments that I've read, they did say that the story is kind of reminiscent off of "Alice in Wonderland", if I stand by correctly. Personally, I don't like these kind of genres, however, because of the writer's astonishing writing skills, it made me captivated and embrace the story even if the genre is not one of my likings. That's pretty neat if I would say!

Next up is the take on the characters. The characters are on-point and well-written. They interact well with the surroundings as well as the characters around them that makes the story more intriguing and lively. An excellent take!

We already know that the book cover is superb, so, I'm not going to look into that. The grammar and punctuations are in good shape, so, that's good! I guess the downside of this story is the writing style of the writer. The writer uses a lot of words that are not as common for people to use. In other words, the usage of "deep words" or the lack of "Layman's Term" to describe such words. Considering that the characters are in a world full of "royalty" with kings, queens, princes, and princesses alike, I guess it is reasonable to use such deep words, however, I think it could be executed better because using an excessive amount of it can make the narrative somewhat confusing, making the message "not get across".

Overall, if I word describe the story in one word, I would say the word "royal" or maybe the word "magnificent". This story is a must! It's one of those stories that can be published. Good work! It's worth a try!

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Preserved in Ink

I don't know how to write a review to be honest 🤓, but anyways, let's get to it! (This review is based on the latest chapter, specifically chapter 7)

First off, the plot is something to look forward to. It's not predictable and I don't know what will happen next. With this though, it makes you feel engaged to the story as you crave for more chapters to come... I guess is a strong word, huh?

Second, the writing is good to the point that it feels "realistic". This "realistic" feeling is not like the others where it just feels boring because of it. Yours on the other hand, is completly the opposite of that, and that what makes the story engaging! The humor, the drama, and the interaction between the characters are superb, and I know that all of those will improve more as the story continues.

Third is the downside of the story. Although everything about the story is great, what bothers me the most the punctuations. It seems that you fluctuate between the usage of periods (.) and commas (,) in every dialogue. For example, you did it like this:
"Mimi, you're very talented." She said.
When it's supposed to be like this:
"Mimi, you're very talented," she said.

Just a tip here, at the end of writing the dialogues of the characters, you use commas (,) to indicate that the sentence is incomplete. For example:
"I feel tired," he whispered.
"I think the answer is A," William, my friend since middle school, hesitated.
Using commas are the most common, especially if a tagline like "he said", "she said", etc (I maybe wrong here because I forgot the name for those things).

On the other hand, using periods (.) indicate that the sentence is complete (or something lol). For example:
"You came here because of this? What a loser." After he said that, the room became silent.
You see the difference?

This might not be a helpful review, however, I'd hope that this might help you in some way or another for your story to improve. Try researching on how to write proper dialgues for more clariffications. Overall, the story is astonishing, the writing is great, but some punctuations here and there needs some polishing. A long review lololol sorry about that!

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Impactful

From a writer who is fairly new, the story is so good! The story overall is something interesting and it felt so refreshing to read another of these genuine works of art. You may have to re-read and carefully analyze the plot and its chapters as the story goes on because of the fast-paced writing, but if you're into that, this would work well for you! I highly recommend this!

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