My God that's good reading
It was like reading about myself every other night, down to the fan being on- even in winter- to keep me company. I felt the growing fear over not being able to understand that something horrible was coming, but the nervousness of not being sure you'd seen or heard anything at all.
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The writing style was clean and descriptive. I could read it like I was watching it on TV rather than reading a computer screen. And your metaphors were fun and understandable. Also, you didn't use big words like you only looked 'em up and slipped them in there.
The character was likable, he made you feel for him, while you have a wonder if he might be slightly schizophrenic and paranoid to be alone, because thought most people are scared at night, not a lot of them have knives between the mattress and boxspring. It takes the old school 'It was a dark and stormy night' plot and turns it into 'It was a dark and lonely night'.
This something to keep an eye on. I enjoyed it very much.