Great, but needs to be edited!
I really liked the storyline, it was very interesting, though this book seems like a first draft. The dialogue has a lot of grammar and punctuation mistakes, such as forgetting to put a period at the end before the close quotation marks. Your writing style is unique, and to be honest, but the type I like to read, no offense, but even so, I really thought the story was intriguing, just needs to be cleaned up a little. Also, an important point, you tell a lot of things directly, when you should be showing. For example, instead of saying that Perrie is strong and rude, show her being rude and show her doing things that would portray her strength. That’s just an example, but you tell a lot of things when you could be showing. I have to admit, it was a bit confusing reading, but I liked the story nonetheless. The turn of events was interesting! You just need to look over it again 😊
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