Robert Alan Ryder

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RAZOR: FESTIVAL OF THE DAMNED

The first in a series of collected short story horror fiction, I feel this one creeps even me out the most. in my exploration of writing freestyle flash horror fiction, I am focusing on what really scares many an individual today. People that like the SAW movie series, they may find interest in this short story, and many others I will write to add into a collected volume of horror fiction.

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MASKS: THE FESTIVAL OF PURGING

One of two freewriting style pieces of flash fiction based on horror.The first I submitted to a magazine publisher for approval.

This short story explores beliefs in exploration in short of what many people view as associations with evil. Evil, is not necessarily what people believe it to be.

This is only my second attempt at writing short fiction horror, and a believe it is a good read.

Enjoy the story, and feel free to tell me what you think. reviews are a big part of the writer's craft.

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Alaric Swift: The Cheater Of Death

Original story, and original characters, A curiosity piece in in tell- tale adventuring. the writing style aids the reader in the exploration of the original fantasy world. I am not too sure in using the main catalyst of the hero's quest, as being the murder of the hero's family for children. Regardless, the story was a good read.

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TALES OF THE ROOK: TIME OF THE ROOK

This was an original piece of mystery fiction written in a Phillip Marlowe style. Centered to take place in the later 1940s, this gave me a chance to use real life locations from historical perspective. Multiple plot twists will keep the reader interested in following the story until the end. Interesting characters that will be written into follow- up stories, will undergo many changes throughout the series. This is a good read for anyone that is a fan of classic private detective stories.

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The Hawk and the Scorpion

First of all, the Hawk and the Scorpion; was a great story. The writing style shows the writer's experience, and understanding of the topic.

I see some minor issues with punctuation. Some commas, seem like they are unnecessary, and can interfere with the smoothness of flow for the written sentence.

A couple of the sentences can benefit from additional nouns, to enhance clarification of the words shared.
Example: (from manuscript), "To admit that the camel- being a superior animal though, would cause a loss of respect....." In this sentence, I added the word being and a hyphen before the word, to aid in clarifying the sentence.

This story, shows a lot of talent, and is a great read.

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Volitile Vindications Vindictive Valkyrie

One of my first attempts at dark science fiction horror... This story was actually conceived from a dream I had a couple of years back... I dreamed of a dark place with naked women chained to a turntable like platform that were luring men to them for their sexual pleasures... As soon as the one in the dream neared the woman, she became something monstrous and inhuman; but the lust could not be defeated and the one entranced had to have her... Razors rose at the same time on mechanical arms to slice the lured tempted for their sin. I thought shortly on naming this dream for a story and it suck with me. I called the nonhuman women torturers from my dream The Valkyrie, and it amounted for a good story which is a good read.

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The Devil's Journals volume Four

The fourth of my anthology series. A collection of original horror stories that alters the perspective of the readers in various ways. All good stories. All good reads. All working to scare the reader into immediate appreciation. Perfect reading for Halloween. Horror stories that can appeal to fans of all genres.

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Persistent Poltergeist

This is one of my first attempts at writing a humorous horror story. I looked at the picture, and immediately I had a story in mind. The ghost; it seems like a could be a little troublesome. I kind of visualize the work as being a poltergeist or phantasm and quite possibly- evil Casper, the not-so friendly ghost. This turned out to be a really good story with an unexpected ending. I may in fact expand on this idea in the future.

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Hell's Heaps

This story is an example of art inspiring writing. I spent one day looking for pictures to visualize as written stories. English composition writing classes teach us that all pictures have a story to tell. Paintings too are pictures in their artistic expression. I looked at this artwork and came up with the title for my new horror anthology story: Hell's Heaps. This story bridges a gap between generations. It is a good read with an unexpected twist.

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The Clockmaker

This is my first attempt at writing a full length horror fiction novel. With this idea, I have been working to come up with something original and have been trying to make the story as scary as possible without making it disturbing. In my attempt, I have changed little; and have decided to go with three shortened books for a trilogy. later when I have completed the series, I will consider a new title if I do not continue with the original idea. This is one of my best efforts yet in horror fiction and is an entertaining read.

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Space DSE Deep Space Exploration

this story is my first attempt at writing a science fiction story that is based more on science than just fiction. I was skeptical goin in on writing this story; feeling that realistic space disasters without problems like aliens and robots and interstellar wars could be boring; but so far, I like what I have come up with This completed first book in the series introduces the characters and the star ship that will soon be a big part of their lives. the second book is in progress.

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The Devil's Journals Volume Three

Volume three of six. My third anthology collections of short horror fiction that twists around the fiction that is the devil, and his ideals that you may read in pages or see on film. All good stories. The more horror stories I write, the better I will get at coming up with some original ideas.

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The Power of Greyskull

Every story has a beginning..... With My Masters of the Universe series, I am exploring options of reimagining Masters of the Universe characters by providing new origins for each character. The story is going a little slower than I imagined, and I decided to cut the first book short, but I believe the story is coming out to be a pretty good read. The sequel will introduce Skeletor and the creation of Snake Mountain.

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The Lone Wolf and the Wandering Wizard

This story, is by my assessment my best written to date of the fantasy fiction genre. My original idea was to title the story The Lone Wolf only. After a little bit of thought, I decided to change the idea to a series based on a wandering wizard and the interesting creatures, artifacts and adversaries he encounters on his way. If you like original fantasy fiction with a slight touch of humor this is a good read for you.

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The Knocking

One of my spookiest stories written yet for my horror anthology series. One decent reflection of individuals' perspective with an unexpected twist. Who's that knocking and knocking upon your walls?

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N.E.M.E.S.I.S

What can be most likely the worst of enemies? The majority of these fears of adversity are based on that unseen darkness that dwells within our own beings. Those without fear may actually conceal this looming adversity, bottled up within themselves...... One of my newer additions to my horror anthology series..... This tale is a god spooky read..... I recommend this one to anyone that enjoys short horror fiction.....

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Extraterrestrial Traveler: Strange New World

My first attempt at writing a somewhat of a humorous styled piece of original fiction story telling. strange New World explores fiction from the view point of an alien species on a continuing expedition to find dead worlds that can be terraformed to repopulate with new life. It turned out to be a really good story and will appeal to anybody that likes to read short novel humor science fiction stories. I am already under way working on writing a sequel to this story. The second one will be funnier, and more entertaining then the first.

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Hunters and Stalkers: Wolverine Vs. Predator/ALIENS

Part two of my Wolverine vs. Predator story series ends with an unexpected cliffhanger. Wolverine having to rush on one felled Predator to try and keep its explosive device from taking out the X-man, and a good section of the land with him. In putting together the story, I feel I have been fairly consistent. I feel maybe that adding so many characters is actually slowing me down on finishing the finale, but I will get the trilogy finished.....

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Wraith: Gravedigger's Nightmare

This story, I feel has a good gothic; old style horror feel to it. I like this kind of style in writing horror fiction, and I believe that I will explore the possibility of writing more like this one. Anybody that likes classic or gothic horror will enjoy reading this story.

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DARK WALKER OF THE PLAINS

My first attempt at writing an original western style story. I believe the results pretty much share my success my first part of tale's completion all by themselves..... I rote this story with the rhythm from the song "Riders of the Storm" in mind..... People that enjoy reading westerns and science fiction fantasy westerns will enjoy Dark Walker of the Plains: The Riders of the Storm Book One.

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Idols Insidious: Molech The Sacrifice

I had a lot of fun with this one. With my own original take on horror fiction, I am looking at ideas from different perspectives, and I am aiming at sharing new ideas that most people have not yet heard of. The picture I have chosen, the idol in itself represents all kinds of story telling opportunities, and that is only when you look at the idol from the outside.....

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James Bond Doomsday

This being my first James Bond trilogy novel project, I feel it came together pretty easy. quite a bit of my time was spent in regular research to make the fiction more reasonable in acceptance of the readers' interests. This first James Bond trilogy has given me the idea of sharing the story adventures of other double o' agents of MI6, And I am currently preparing to work on My MI6 files series and the sequel novel series to my James Bond: Meltdown series.... readers that like reading James Bond fiction will enjoy the entire trilogy.....

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Run, The Death Spirits Come

With this one, I have started a trilogy based on a family of hunters that are trapped in an African safari. I aim at making this story as visual as possible by researching real ideas and locations; and by throwing real hazards at the family as they try to escape the curse of nature's rise against them for the hunting down and the slaying of a rare white lion within a sanctuary that by law was meant to protect it. This one, it was a challenge for me proposed by my sister. I believe, I may get use to writing stories like this. Readers that enjoy fictional tales of action and adventure will enjoy this first story of the three part book series......

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ENTOMBED

One of my best pieces of short horror fiction yet. One of the scariest things to consider, being entombed alive. The more I commit my interests to writing horror fiction, the better I believe I am getting at coming up with original and scary tales. my goal is to make the stories as scary as possible, while upholding somewhat of a positive balance of real world morals. Readers that like to read short horror fiction will like reading Entombed.....

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Raveshing Gashadokuru: Night Time Rave

It seems a little awkward to be doing my own writing reviews, but it does give me a chance to share my thoughts on the work..... For this piece of horror fiction, I actually went to a reference for source material to come up with the story. For my horror anthology series, I was strapped for a title and for an idea, so I opened up my personal reference copy of The Encyclopedia of Ghosts and Spirits; and the idea grew from there..... I like this one, it kind of feels in some instances to an original idea that masters of horror like Stephen King may conceive. Although, I am in no way comparing myself to the man's writing. My writing is okay, but I am nowhere near King's level of talented experience..... This is a good read for anybody that likes to read horror fiction, and my find themselves drawn in curiosity of the title itself.

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The House Beyond The Hill

This I feel is one of my best works yet. I am coming to an understanding that I have many a style I can write into for the sharing of stories. This one came to me rather quickly, and I had some genuine fun in writing the tale. It probably could be scarier. I will aim for something really scary in a second fearful fairy tale in the future.

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Heart of Darkness, Queen of Raven's Black

The second book of my Sovereign of lords series for Ravenloft Dungeons & Dragons shared world fiction. This second book gave me a chance to explore the Domains of Dread in a little greater depth. Writing for Dungeons & Dragons shared worlds is a good way to learn the necessities of fictional world building for your own original ideas. This book guides the reader to who The Sovereign of Lords mat turn out to be. Fans of Ravenloft and Dungeons and Dragons novels will enjoy reading the first two books in the series, while I continue work on the third and final in the trilogy.

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Lucifer: Pandora's Book

I have become one of the best of Lucifer fans, and it would appear that it is all due to good timing. The series being cancelled so soo; it will have viewers like me hungry for more. I still have hopes of an agreement made that will give the series ongoing continuity in fan fulfillment, but until then; I will write stories based on the television adapted idea. This gives me chance to introduce other Vertigo DC Comic book characters to the idea, and allows me to add new ones of my own conceptions on aiding the story line in ongoing continuity.This was a decent effort on my part, on my understanding of where it looked the story could be leading to; with this first book leading into a tie-in with The Sandman. Fans of Lucifer will enjoy reading this new story in fandom based on the television series idea.

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The Devil'[s Journals Volume Two

The second volume of my horror anthology series is allowing me to get a better feel of the horror fiction I would like to continue writing. The first was okay. two of my best read stories list in the pages of the first volume. Devious Doctrines and Evil Experiments seem to be of a raised interest these days in horror film, and the story evil Eyes is by part one of my all time favorites of all my written works. fans of my horror anthology fiction will enjoy volume two of The Devil's Journals.

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Checking In

In this work of a type of prose, I explored the thoughts of people's thoughts and dreams when checking into various motels. I believe for only my first attempt of writing prose in so curious the nature; that it is a good first piece attempt at sharing thoughts and dreams people may have when staying at a motel while on a trip of whatever reasoning. there even seems to be a miniscule amount of what could be considered as poetry in the works. Of all considerations, I accomplished what I had set out to task, in this first of hopefully many other prose-type writing efforts.

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Forlorn Festival of Fear

This story, I like the plot and the unexpected ending I came up with, but I am second guessing it to day as being more of an adventure story than of a horror tale. For an original story, it is all right, but I know I can do better when thinking on stories that can actually scare people. This story gave me little chance to explore any kind of style, and by some standards; it may seem a little flat in reading. It still makes for an interesting read to those that like adventure fiction.....

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Tales from the Scrapyard

This idea gave me a chance to explore a new kind of prose. Gathering the titles from several films, I outlined them into similar mentions, and laid them out in an outlined story. This is an original concept idea as far as I can tell, And every word in the story is pieces of titles from films and novels. this is what creativity is all about..... Coming up with new ideas, and realizing them in a form of expression.....

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Transformers Vengeance

I have been a fan of The Transformers since the toys were first released in America...... Since then, I have watched every American television show and all of the films wit the exception of The Last Knight; and I have gotten a chance to watch some of the Japanese shows as well. One thing that caught me and other Transformers fans about the first film has to be the death of Jazz. being cybernetic life forms, It stands to reason that as long as their spark is undamaged, the sentience should survive. My first thoughts to a new Transformers story was bringing back Jazz in an interesting and familiar way, and so I decided to revamp the Marvel super hero character Circuit Breaker. This story will entertain fans of the films and of the original comic book series.

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ASSASSIN SCORNED: TALES OF THE ROOK BOOK TWO

Outside the box of the normal idea of what people consider mystery and teetering more towards action thriller..... This sequel to Time of The Rook gave me the opportunity to complete a little more research on the era the fictional story takes place in, and adapt the markers of reality for incorporation into the idea. I managed to introduce two new villains and some new supporting cast members that will be further explored in the third book of the series and in the books that follow the third.... I feel that this one is better than the first for interest of new original threats from within the fictional past setting and I believe it will appeal to the readers of the first book, and to readers of crime fiction......

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James Bond Countdown

This James Bond idea, allowed me to divide it into a novel of three parts. Countdown, the natural sequel to a story based on global meltdown...... The characters are original for Bond's allies. The Desert Rose inspired by a song by Sting and a woman of international notoriety...... This is a good read, and all though it may currently be light in some areas other than dialogue; I believe it will appeal to fans of James Bond fiction.....

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One: the Walking Dead

My first attempt at writing a Walking Dead related story..... I feel if I commit myself to future writings in The Walking Dead fictional universe, I will come up with a better plot for a story. These events I conceived before Carl's death; and were meant to squeeze in for a current season tale..... Other than the fact that there turned out to be very little in plot; I do believe this is a good Walking Dead story that will be enjoyed by fans and cast of the show; and hopefully by the creators of the idea.....

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THE EXPERIMENT: RAT IN A MAZE

How would it feel, if you were stripped of your clothes, of your devices, and of you dignity; and tossed into a cage; with your future pending on navigating a deadly maze? I feel that this is one of my most original pieces of horror fiction today, If not one of the most frightening. It is an entertaining read, and may appeal to fans of film like the movie SAW; and similar experiment movies such as The Eyes.....

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Death The Masquerade

This story I conceived as an idea generated from an interest in new horror film fiction..... I wanted to make the story s scary as possible, while adding a twist like you may see in new horror films today. Fans of stories like Stephen King's The Shining may enjoy this tale of home invaders having themselves trapped by the homeowner; only to find out her family harbors many a dark secret..... This one, like the stories I conceived for the Greek mythological character Arachne, I am thinking of expanding on in the near future....

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The Chair

In my attempts at writing short stories for my horror anthology series, I feel that this one may be of my most original ideas...... What is scarier that the thought of being executed when you do not realize you have committed a crime; when by your memories, you have not?

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It's The Creeps!

In writing ghost stories for my horror fiction anthology series, I have to admit that I find it difficult to come up with new ideas...... This is my first attempt at a ghost story..... I believe the unexpected ending may one day classify this tale as one of the most interesting of ghost stories to be told today, if not one of the second best..... I believe this ghost story will appeal to fans of ghost story fiction.....

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JAMES BOND: TERMINUS

My first attempt at writing James Bond fiction. Terminus is an original story with an original problem. Bond and a small gathering of allies must prevent S.P.E.C.T.R.E from igniting a catastrophic global meltdown. One agent prepared to use new satellite defense laser technologies to target fuel refineries and power plants around the world. James Bond:Terminus will appeal to fans of James Bond fiction.

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EVIL EYES

Another piece of my horror anthology fiction I am writing under the title of: The Devil's Journal. This story explores the reality that not only is real evil of our actions; but to be experienced from a matter of personal perspective. This story explores the horrific possibility that the Exorcist is not quite what they seem, and the alleged possessed individual may actually be innocent of any wrong doing.

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ARACHNE: THE BROODING

My original idea was to be a survivor story of a girl that grew up with the name Nervous Nellie. I did not like the way the first story worked out. It seemed that I could do much more with the story's main character, and I conceived the second story of the trilogy. Arachne is now to be read as a sort of dark heroine for horror fiction, in a rising war against demons. This story is an enjoyable read and will appeal to fans of dark hero horror fiction.

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CARNIVAL OF CROWS: SAMHAIN

Last year, I conceived a work of original Halloween fiction, and I started writing the story Lantern Jack.... Now, working on horror short story fiction; for my multiple volume anthology series, I have devised an origin for the character..... I am still undecided on whether or not I want to make this character a dark hero like I did with Arachne; but it still turned out a really good idea.... I believe fans of fantasy and of horror will enjoy this story. As with all other tales I write, lantern Jack inspires many a new original idea......

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JOURNAL DE-DIABOLI: THE DEVIL'S JOURNAL VOLUME ONE

My first trial in writing original horror fiction. I feel I am developing a knack for writing scary stories, and with this series of gathered short stories; I am working on my first major anthology in multiple volumes. This gathering of original short fiction horror will appeal to fans of horror fiction.

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Survive the Night

Great writing style and talent. Great story. The writer expresses the scenes with an experienced amount of creative detailing. This story is a good read.

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The Blackening

This story is a stand in words against the evil bigotries of man and of women today. It is a symbolic piece of the old idea that justice is served at times in unexpected and appropriate manner. For fans of horror fiction. this is one spooky tale.

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WOLVERINE/ PREDATOR; HUNTER/PREY

Wolverine, ALIENS, and Predator, for a long time they have been of my listed favorites of comics and of film.
Being this is my first trial of writing into so popular the genres, I feel the work came out pretty easy. My idea for the book is a trilogy of three consecutive novella stories in one volume. For purposes of Inkitt, I will share each as different books. This is a great story, and fans of Wolverine, of ALIENS, and Predator; are going to love what I have in store for the characters.

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SURVIVE THE WALKING DEAD

FROM NIGHT OF THE LIVING DEAD TO FEAR THE WALKING DEAD, ZOMBIES HAVE BECOME A WELCOME ICON IN HORROR ENTERTAINMENT..... I HAVE BEEN THINKING OF A WALKING DEAD IDEA FOR QUITE SOME TIME..... THE EAST, THERE IS THE WALKING DEAD..... THE WEST, THERE IS FEAR THE WALKING DEAD..... FOR THE SOUTH WEST, THE FOUR CORNERS; I AM WORKING ON A FAN FICTION STORY I TITLED SURVIVE THE WALKING DEAD..... THIS EFFORT ALLOWS ME TO USE MY CREATIVE INTERESTS IN SHARING NEW STORIES OF ONE OF THE HIGHEST RATED TELEVISION SERIES IN EXISTENCE TODAY....

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FIGHT FOR SURVIVAL

First off, this is what appears to be the great beginning of a good story. The only issue I see, is that it does not elaborate on an understanding of one single plot. It reads good, with the exception of a couple of editing errors, but it ends without an acknowledged resolution.

With the sentence '..... he replied "to" his father....." the word to, added to the sentence, will aid in smoother reading of the sentence.

In chapter 2, the first paragraph could do with a little elaboration on what the robots in the streets are doing that is cause of concern with comparison to the issues being suffered by the parents. Remember, if you are seriously interested in writing; you will want to sell your work.

In chapter three, the sentence "As he arrived "on", or "at" the campus..... the word on, or at will better support the flow of the sentence.

Reading between the lines, I can see that there is a good story here. A little more proofreading and editing, and a little more focus on getting to the resolution of the plots, and it can be a great one.

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BLACKENED THORN DARKENED HEART

With nothing but some old dungeons and dragons reference materials, the computer and the internet to update me on current events, and a couple of ideas; I feel that I have come up with a decent trilogy for the Dungeons and Dragons RAVENLOFT shared world, in novels. Blackened Thorn, Darkened Heart is the first of three. The second installment: Heart of Darkness, Queen of Raven's Black; already in progress..... This was, I feel a good imagining of new and interesting characters, in an integration with old existing legends; that aid the new- comers in challenging their success, and in aiding them; in their own unusual ways.

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The Planet at the End of the Universe

Interpreted as what could be rewritten as a script for an actual televised episode of the television series Doctor Who, the story makes for a good shared tale from the Doctor Who universe.

My only recommendations would be descriptions for the Morestrans placed somewhere in the story, for those readers that may not be familiar with the Doctor Who universe in fiction.

Places in the manuscript, where one word stands as a sentence, These can be extended as a pause after the words, with a series of periods. There are also a couple of places where the writing could elaborate further on what is being shared in the story, by adding one or more words to the sentence.
Example: (from manuscript), "Her voice trailed off as the figure moved closer, pausing at the edges of their combined flashlight beams; Its head tilted quizzically, its features shrouded in shadow." In this sentence, as an edit; I placed the word its before the words: head tilted.

This work, by my educated opinion; is a good effort, and the writer is a good story teller. Proof-reading, to make sure the sentences read smoothly; so others can enjoy the writing, this is about the best advice any collaborator in writing today can offer.

Allowing other writers to proof- read the work, this too is a good way to get the best out of a drafted manuscript.

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The Hooded Man

That was a great read. I was immediately drawn in to the plot, and I could tell what was about to happen. It is quite literally a thrill ride, and one of the most original short stories I have read in quite some time.

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