A good start
The start of the story was pretty good, it didn't get me super hooked but everyone knows nothing interesting happens until you read further. I was like 'What am I about to read?" when I saw it was about a model. However, as I kept on reading it actually got interesting and I found myself vibing with Emma every time she knocked into that mysterious guy especially with all the comebacks!
Read the story now
I've seen heaps of books that are filled with mistakes so I didn't really mind the mistakes every now and then. My opinion right now; don't focus too much on the spelling and grammar since your so early in your story. Don't get me wrong though, do fix those mistakes because it's definitely annoying when the reader picks up on mistakes! You can always go back after your done and edit! :))
Anyway... Just keeping doing what you're doing because you're doing great!