Samih
wow it was a very nice story... I know several people on here who would be willing to give an in depth review. NOTE: They might not give you all nice feedback, but that will make you stronger. I highly recommend "Someone". "Someone" (a username) gives very in-depth reviews, and once you edit your story and feel confident about it, I'd recommend seeing what someone else thinks. :) 3.) Interview your characters. Basically, come up with a list of questions, some of which you would ask people when you make friends or what you would find on a profile of sorts online. Favorite color? Secret hobbies? Favorite sport? Food they love to crave? etc. This will really help you get to know the characters that you're writing, and you can use these things to help build depth to them in your story. OVERALL: I think this is an interesting story that has potential. Don't forget that. If you have any questions, feel free to ask me. I hope this helped you. :
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