Awesome story and talented writer
You are a very gifted writer. Your chapters were faultless, and I can’t wait to read more! I can offer only limited feedback, because I personally couldn’t find fault.
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Chapters/plot: Your chapters flowed effortlessly, with interesting dialogue, interactions, and plot twists. Each word in every sentence had earned its place, and is a mark of a well polished story. You have a great prose, with just the write mix of exposition, and description.
Without giving too much away to your readers, your plot is unique and pulls you in from the first chapter. I came across no sections that made me want to skip ahead - you had me for the duration!
The only feedback I can offer is on the blurb. The blurb could be helped by removing the questions posed (surprised/feel fear) and allowing it to focus just on who the character is, the conflict, and the stakes.