Sarah Jamet

91 Days

It's a great start. I like the premise of the story, 91 days to live. I think the author can definitely dig deep into some interesting ideas: depression, living each day fully etc.
I also like that the relationship that's centre in the story (so far) is the one between father and child. I also like the style of the author who dives straight into the crux of the story and doesn't overload the readers with detailed descriptions of each character and their clothing.
I'm interested to see where the author will take this story :)
Don't forget to edit :)

Freaky!

I really enjoyed the prologue of this story, it was my favorite part, well-written, well-paced, captivating and downright freaky! I was really hoping for that scene to be continued or developed further at the story but it didn't come back, that was a shame. Maybe it will in the next part?
I enjoyed reading this, the premise of this story, though not original, is very freaky and well constructed. It reminded me a bit of Coraline during the first nightmare sceance, which I liked.
I did have problems connecting with the main character, especially at the begining, he was quite egotistical, bit of a smartass and seemed unable to empathise with the people around him (though, being a teenager, that's realistic). I was happy to see him take on a more protective and braver attitude at the end.
There were a few grammar issues and typos in there, but easy to fix when you're editing.

Potential

I think the premise of your story is interesting, the orphan boy picked up on the streets, and I wonder where you are going to take the story. I think it has the potential to develop well.
I have to admit, I had a hard time reading it because of the grammar and punctuation.

Refreshing

This story was well-written, well-paced and a refreshing take on the werewolf world. I really enjoyed reading it, the characters were well described and constructed.
I definitely recommend this story if you enjoy good werewolf lore!

Great potential!

The first thing that I really liked about this story was the setting and the world that the author has created. Set in a sort of modern, post-environmental apocalypse, segregated world was a really interesting and fresh view of element wielders. The author gives a lot of details about the surroundings, people and clothes (I(m not sure I need to always know what everyone is wearing though) so it's really easy to imagine this fantasy world and get into the story. I definitely imagined the Shadow Realm like the Upside Down in Stranger Things. I also liked the characters and the playful, flirty friendship between the two main characters. And there are some interesting ideas that I can't wait for the author to develop (discrimination against fire wielders for example).
I'm going to keep reading :D

Original

I liked the originality of this story in it's setting. The characters were interesting as well. And the play between, the characters was fun to follow.
I admit I had difficulty reading it because of the way it's punctuated and the spaces between the paragraphs.
I think a little editing and some more time spent on descriptions could be beneficial.

Well-paced and romantic

I really enjoyed reading this story.
A retelling of the story of Persephone and Hades through modern-day characters Penny and Haze. I really liked the slight allusions to the mythology and but also the author's fresh take on the story.
The author takes her time with the descriptions and character development. The story is well-paced, it doesn't feel rushed or too stretched out and the technical writing skills are spot-on!
I am excited to keep reading this story to find out more and follow along on Penny and Haze's story.

Scorching on the rocks!

I am really enjoying reading this story. Well-paced, good character development and man, is it sexy! The tension is palpable. I can't wait for the next update :)

Fast-paced and interesting turn of events

This story surprised me! In a good way :)
I found it very fast-paced but also subtle in its construction. It enjoyed the take on the werewolf world, but my favourite was the main character. I was frustrated at times, reading the chapters and not quite understanding what was going on, but as I continued to read, I understood that it was the MC's vision of the world and that it reflected her condition. Very well done.
Also refreshing to have a story that wasn't centred on a broody alpha.
Don't forget to edit :)