I wouldn't say this was the best story I've ever read, but I could see that even if it was just the first draft, the author was able to put across what she wanted to express quite well.
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First off, the title was a bit lacking, I felt, though maybe that refers to the overall plot of the story. If you can, try to come up with another title; otherwise, you may leave it as it is, up to you.
Secondly, the cover. I'm not sure that suffices it - the forest-path. Honestly, it doesn't tell me anything about the plot or the story. It's just a road, a pathway. What is it? How does it correspond to the title? I didn't see any link, but you think there is, then sure.
Thirdly, the plot. It's a great idea, I'll admit that - great potential. The narration was very good, though at some points, I think it was going from third person narrative to first person, present tense to past tense. Anyhow, these are just minor mistakes that can be corrected with an edit. There are a few grammar errors - again, can be corrected with an edit. Some inconsistencies I've already pointed out, though it really is up to you to change them, since they could be part of the plot itself. There are some really intriguing characters, such as Mia and Dean. Especially Mia, so mysterious!
The paragraphs were broken at just the right places for the most part. Ooh, and I loved your descriptions! Well done there!
That's all I have to say. All the best on your writing journey!