Shadowlove

Writing has been my passion since I was able to read. Hope you all enjoy the stories I write^^ Follow me on Instagram: ak.13.fox And support me on Ko-Fi^^

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One of my favorites

This story is one of my favorites. It's written extremely wrll and the story line is amazing. It really caltures your attention. And not to forget the dyanmic between ro and the prince of darkness. It's really fun

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potential is there

There is certainly potential in your story as it has an interesting storyline. However, I miss the depths of the characters. They don't really show any character traits. It also reads a bit robotic. You can easily fix this by restructuring sentences, and by using signal words. When you do this, it will read easier.
The convo's sounds real, but I would add some, she said this while doing that, or her voice showed this emotion. It will create a better picture and also allows you to see what kind of character the person has. And also try to add description about what they feel, how things look, what they smell and more. It will paint a better picture and it will also give the reader the feeling that the story doesn't go to fast, which happens now.
I hope you can use some of these tips, because there is definetely some potential.

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Amazing story

I am hooked by your plot, I really want to know what she is and if she will keep both her mates.
Your writing style is nice to read too, you only need to check for some typos as there are a lot of them. Also, don't add a third person view if it doesn't add anything. The switch from first to third can be confusing sometimes. Another tip is to go jnto more depth, deseibe what they feel, if their heart quickens which feelings are seen in their eyes. It gives the character more personality too.
But overall it's an amazing story and can't wait till next chapter.

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great written

The story is overal really great written. The converstation between the characters sound real and you also desribe the scene very well. I actually do not have any to say on it. It is easy to follow and makes you want to read more.

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Amazing

The story is very well written. It has a couple spelling mistakes, but the storyline makes up for it. It's a book I recommend.

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Amazing

Very well written. Love the dragon too.

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amzing

Amazing story, your descriptions are great and it's very easy to follow. I'm sure that this will be a popular story.

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under the moonligt

The story has a lot of potential and it's easy to follow. However, your descriptions are all right, I notice that it doesn't always flow effortlessly, like you are skipping things. This is no problem, but if you want to get published someday, the story needs to flow effortlessly. This can be a hard thing (I still struggle with it), but you can try to add more descriptions about what she hears, sees. You could write about people talking, hand gestures when someone is talking, the look in their eyes, what they feel. This also paints a better picture of your characters. For the rest, don't use smiley's in your books. It breaks up the story.

All in all, keep up the good work

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Love it

It's a great story and has a lot of potential. however, i notice you don't start a new paragraph when somebody else's talk. This can ve confusing to the reader. For the rest I suggest to start your book with a more exciting introduction, something to pull the reader in. It's not a bad introduction, but i noticed for me it did not really catch my attention, enough to make me read further, but not enough to make me feel excited.

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Great book

The book itself is written well and I love your descriptions. It really pulls the reader in. However, I would recommend to start with a bang. Something that catches the interest of the reader. It will let the reader want to read further. All in all, great book^^

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great story

Your book is great, and I can see it has a lot of potential and the only reason why I didn't gave five stars is because I missed some better descriptions.

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nice story

The story itself has a lot of potential. However, there are a lot of grammatical issues. I would also recommend to change the conversations. It doesn't read nice, and it gives me the feeling as if they are constantly screaming and being overdramatic. If you can change this in the story and restructure some sentence, you will come a long way with your story. ^^

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amazing story

The characters are amazing and it's very easy to follow. There are some grammar and spelling mistakes, but it doesn't make it harder to follow. The descriptions are nice too and I can't wait to find out what will happen.

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great story

The story itself is great and fun to read. The characters are also intruiging. However, I would recommend on focusing and improving your descriptions as those will decide if your book will get published or not. Just read a lot of other works and analize them, prefereblay professionals or inkitt writers who you know write good, and you will be fine. You can learn a lot from other peoples work.

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great story

There is a lot of potential in your story and the convo's sounds real. However, I miss something, some better descriptions of her surrounding area and what she feels. It will allow the reader to get more into the story. For the rest its a lovely story.

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amazing book

just like the title says. It's amazing, it draws you in, making you want to read more. The descriptions are detailed and you can easily feel what the characters feel. I really recommend the book.

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Great book

The idea if the book is amazing. However, I miss some depth in the character (for me they are a bit to plain). You can easily change this by adding something, like a troubled memory or making them overly enthusiastic or very independent.
For the rest your sentence structure is sometimes a bit to robotic. You tend to start each sentence with a verb, waliing in the room;pulling it of, i did that. This is okay, but try to mix it ip with other words and signal words.
All in all, it's a lovely story.

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great book

I really love how your book grabs my attention and I and excited what will happen next. The only reason why I'm not giving you five stars is because of the structure of some sentences. For me, it doesn't read nice if sentences keep starting with I or after. It's not wrong to start with them, but don't overdo it. Try not to write: I walked to the kitchen to makes some bread. After I made it I ate it. I strode to the living room and read a book. (this is a very stupid example as you write better than that, but it shows what I mean) For the rest it's very easy to follow as you describe things perfectly, maybe you could write a bit more about what she sees and feels as she looks around, but it's not a need. I really recommend the book.

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Great book

I like your writing style and how you describe things. However, I notice that I have a hard time following the story in the first chapters as a lot is happening. For the rest it's an amazing book and the story interesting too.

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amazing book

The descriptions are amazing and the book itself really grabs your attention. Do not have any comments on how you can make it better as I really think this is one of the best books I have read.

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great book

I really do not have any tips. I love the main character and you exactly know how to portray her, only giving the readers a better picture to paint. I also love Mckeon who is a jerk, it really keeps the story interesting. Keep up the good work^^

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nice story

the story has me hooked as I really like the characters, especially Levi. You could make Doriane a bit stronger, I get why she is the weak girl, but even weak girls can have strong thoughts, even if they do not act on it. For the rest I recommend on reading through all your chapters to see which sentences you can restructure.

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amazing written

It's greatly written and makes you want to read more with each line. You describe the emotions of the head character in the best way possible and know how to build up the suspense. It's a book I recommend reading if you love fantasy.

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Can be better

I feel like you rushed the story. The characters show potential, but you could have gine into more depth with them. Descriptions helps too, like what they see, hear, feel and what their faces look like. It helps to make a better picture. The storyline shows promise and would be way better if you paid more attention to those details.

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Fun story

It's a fun story to read and easy to follow. I love the dynamic between adams and nai's moms. The descriptions could be a bit better, like what they smell and hear, but overall great story

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it has potential

The story is amazing, and it has potential to become a great story. However, I notice you start often with I and then and more. When you do this, it can read a bit robotic and comes over easy. You can easily change this by using commas and signal words. You could also put more depths in the characters, you can do this by writing more detailed about their struggles, their personality and habits. Another thing is descriptions. They are like the glue to the story, you can use idioms for them to make it even more real. You can easily do this by writing about what their faces look like, the emotion in their eyes, what they smell and see. It allows the reader to paint a better picture. Like when Matto goes to the meadow, you can write about how the moonlight bounces off the lake and how he can smell the fragance of the flowers, maybe wolves howling in the distance, These are all little things but can easiliy give you 200-600 more words per chapter. For the rest the convo's sounds real, which can be a hard thing. your grammar is good too, for as far as I know. I'm not a native speaker, but I do not see any major mistakes.

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Great suspense

It's a great book and makes you want to read more. I don't really have any tips as al the tips I normally give are of no use with this book. The characters are great and you know how to build up suspense. The descriptions are amazing too. However, I would like to see more scenes between her and harren in the beginning of the chapters, it might make it a bit more interesting.

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Great short stories

The short stories are written great. It's easy to follow and if you ever want to write a full book, I would suggest to put a lot of thought in the characters. What kind of developments they make and drama that makes it exciting. Also, descriptions are very important. You're doing that great in the short stories, but maybe you could write a bit more about what they feel. Are their hearts racing, what kind of look do they have in their eyes, what do they smell. It allows the reader to paint a better picture.

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Good book

The discriptions are lovely, however I miss character development and some excitement. The relationship between bella and mars are developing a hit too fast. I know they are mate, but even if they are mates, readers always love to read some drama. Your writing style is very easy to read and to follow. The only thing you need to concentrate on is the character development and some drama.

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Lovely book

I love the book. The descriptions are very nice and the first chapter makes you want to read more. Love it how there might be anither live jnterest, it really sets the tone

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Lovely book

It's a lovely book, and in chaoter two it gets interesting. It's a book I recommend to read.
There a some grammar mistakes, but you could easily fix that with prowritingaid. It's a free aoo that helps you better your grammar, spelling and style

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Nice story

It's a nice story and overall greatly written. The only thing I would change is some of the mama/papa into he or she as it can read a bit annoying. It gets you out of the story.
But an amazing story and can't wait until nexr chapter

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great story

I love it how your story pulls me in, I can't stop reading. It's easy to follow and your writing style is nice too

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Good book

The storyline is very nice. Only thing is that the first couple chapters are very confusing. There is also a lot of mistakes in words and sometimes the sentences aren't written right, but overall the plot of the book is really nice.

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Just making my book known xD

I just wanted to get my book out. Right now I update it every day. The chapters are also pretty long, between 2,5k and 3k words. I hope you will read my book.

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