It’s ... okay.
I read the first three or four chapters but I guess it isn’t for me. I couldn’t connect with any of the characters. We know what they look like, but what about their ages? What grade are they in? What’s the name of the town they live in, the school they attend, etc? Is Anastasia even interested in acting before being magically dumped into Hollywood? Is she even GOOD at it?
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Little details like this serve to give a surprising amount of depth and realism to characters and settings.
I’m sorry to say, I also find the plot to be a little unbelievable.
I think if the twins and Callum were truly Anastasia’s friends, they wouldn’t have turned on her like that. Callum, especially, after being described as the nice golden boy, I can’t picture ever being interested in somebody who is such an obvious bully. Especially to his best friend. It’s a complete contradiction to his character.
Anastasia especially bothered me. I just couldn’t empathize with her at all. Her leaving home and running away, I don’t find believable. She’s an underage kid and there is no way her parents wouldn’t be out searching for her. Or have the authorities on high alert. Her making it in Hollywood in only two years just seemed unnaturally easy. A huge corporation would NOT hire on an underage minor without parental consent. There would be legal repercussions, especially if her face was plastered all over tv and the movies. Somebody would recognize her.
Her agent also could not become her guardian without a whole lot of legal battles. Child protective services would have to step in. Investigations would have to be made to prove Ana was actually neglected. I’m sorry, but nobody would take the word of an angsty, whiny teenager over the proof that she was raised in a perfectly good home, provided for and educated. She would more likely be hauled straight back to her parents and sent to a therapist.
The book does need editing as I noticed numerous grammatical errors and typos as I read.
Overall, the book shows promise but I think the author needs to carefully reconsider her opening chapters and do a little research on how Anastasia might find a more realistic way to leave her hometown and make it big in Hollywood. Such as applying to an acting school across the country or something and being found to have a natural talent, being scouted during a school performance, starting small with things like commercials and working her way up. She at least ought to graduate high school and get a diploma or GED.