There's this wholesome kind of thinking with this. I like the style of just talking about life in general, friends, basketball, the splitting of your parents.. I would have liked to see more details and the inner workings of your feelings. More of how did this make you feel at the time, what were the struggles that came about, what did the rest of your family feel? I found myself just skimming a lot of words because it was a little too "ok nothing is happening here".
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Also, paragraphs. We need to see breaks in the writing. Although the chapters are short and it's pretty much all on the same subject, there is still that need for paragraphs that my brain was desperate for. It makes for a much easier read and if I look away for a minute, I don't feel like I'm lost when I go back.