Diane April

Very Good

I really enjoyed this as far as plot goes. It makes a great beginning and the level of detail makes you think you're right there with the characters. Just a few points about punctuation. there should be a comma after a statement: "I took the dog for a walk," she said. Even when a question is asked, "Can I buy you a drink?" he asked. It's still considered one sentence when you add he asked or she said, etc.

Other than that I found your writing style to be very strong, very interesting and I look forward to reading more.

Awesome Read

Really liked the concept of this story. The beginning had a great explanation about how things worked in the real world that people tend to overlook. It was a nice change from the usual zombie story that just makes things up as they go along and actual facts don't matter.

Paragraphs

There's this wholesome kind of thinking with this. I like the style of just talking about life in general, friends, basketball, the splitting of your parents.. I would have liked to see more details and the inner workings of your feelings. More of how did this make you feel at the time, what were the struggles that came about, what did the rest of your family feel? I found myself just skimming a lot of words because it was a little too "ok nothing is happening here".

Also, paragraphs. We need to see breaks in the writing. Although the chapters are short and it's pretty much all on the same subject, there is still that need for paragraphs that my brain was desperate for. It makes for a much easier read and if I look away for a minute, I don't feel like I'm lost when I go back.

Nice

I liked this story. It was emotional and raw and I could see this really happening. It was sad at the end but I felt a little uplifted that they were going to be together. Is that weird?

Loved It

I really enjoyed this. I thought, in the beginning, it was a little like Poe's the Tell Tale Heart and I was sure the gentleman was going to do something like throw the clock out the window or run it over and be done with it. I was thrown slightly at the end but was not disappointed.

Stunning

Simplicity at it's best. Short and sweet. Very enjoyable. It's always nice when you get through a story feeling like you really enjoyed that or that you were fulfilled because the writer was able to give you all you need. There wasn't description filler or pointless conversations, it all flowed nicely.

Good Read

I really liked this story. It was easy to read. Sometimes I found it confusing to go back and forth between the group sessions and the flashbacks (?) of the story but it got easier further into the story.