Choosing Destiny: The Chosen
Intriguing story. The beginning of the story draws you in, and fits with the title, that this girl was chosen. The main character's story becomes more complicated as the chapters go on, and we learn more about her life at the same time as the main character. These characters get to know each other very quickly and become friends.
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The harm she did, which is a huge one (I don't want to give anything away), shouldn't be forgiven so fast. It would add interest if she is quarreling with the person she harmed and slowly they start to forgive and get along, even start to feel something more than friendship. Maybe if you add a line that says the main character spent weeks with the new people and they slowly got to know each other and realized they had more in common than differences, and now consider each other friends.
The friends believe Destiny has more control over her urges, trust she won't kill anymore, and are willing to fight for her. Just to show that time had passed. I don't know, just a suggestion. Also the old vamps. Very interesting characters, and I hope we see how this group continues forward, to fight evil. Enjoyed reading, good job.