One can't be a writer, if they don't know what it means and brings with it.
Okay so I do understand that it's a work in progress, with only 5 chapters in and it's not good manners that I complain about the technical mistakes now. So, let me start with the things I like.
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I like the plot. I mean the concept on which it is built is certainly intriguing. It's different than your typical best friend romances, and I like it for that. A fresh concept. And I am sure, it's only going to become more interesting.
But I feel that author has a lot to improve. Apart from the general typos, spelling, tenses, punctuation mistakes that we all make, the work still seems a bit amateur. First off, I don't think that the characterization of the female lead, has been done properly. It's like she's a weak girl, who wants to but doesn't stand up for herself. People need a strong chacracter. Sure she has her own flaws, but that too needs to be built properly. And the details are important. Throughtout the story, I noticed that you confused the color of the eyes, the names and things like that.
But I do think, that the author can improve. And after all, it has just started. I am sure, that's it's gonna be one awesome read.
I will keep updating my review as the story progresses.
Edit: I had to reduce the stars to one, because the author doesn't seem to understand something important that every writer should. CONSENT IS IMPORTANT! You can't just write in your story that the male lead kisses the female lead thrice, without her permission. Even though you mkae it sound like she enjoyed it, it doesn't justify what the male lead did. As writers, it's important that we understand our responsibility and don't write anything that gives out the wrong message. It's only to kisses in this story, but it migt turn into forced intercourse in someone else's story. One might think I am just exaggerating, but it is indeed something important.