Sparrowkeeper

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The Diaries of Sex, Secrets & Seductions of Amb

Not a bad idea for a storyline, however, your placements of commas were hazardously done and the placement of characters talking within the long paragraphs has caused a little confusion and difficulty with getting into the story.

To better this, I would recommend beginning a new paragraph when a character speaks, when the subject or camera angle changes. I would also recommend taking away the brackets as they are not needed, there is the ability to write words in italics on this app/website if needed. Also the censoring of yourself is unneeded as you have shown and picked the age rating of your book, if you are not comfortable with the cursing in your book, maybe do not write them?

Keep up the good work and brainstorming for book ideas!

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The Hidden Fragrance

The grammar needs some help and buffing out. There is no need to have a lot of cussing within descriptions and “ass” could be paralleled with something else.
Otherwise, the plot is really good and has been keeping an even fast burn pace which hooks the reader in and keeps them guessing what will happen next.
Can’t wait for the next chapters, good luck

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Dino Knights Book One A New Age

This is very different to what I'm used to reading, so I am sorry if this comes off as blunt.
The plot idea was there, however description of characters and their movements, such as what is in their hands or adorned on their bodies, is needed to be altered. Also your referral to characters, which the mains do not know the names of, could be shortened, such as seen with Stygian being dubbed the "Biker guy", could have possibly been nicknamed the Biker until his name was known.

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Bloodhound

To be honest, I really enjoy everything I have read so far. The way you write is really well done and captures the reader quite nicely in this 3rd-person style of writing, almost makes me envious as I've tried to do this technique but it still needs work. Even the information you've placed into it isn't a huge overload. As for recommendations, I've got a good handful that I'm sharing this to.

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