As soon as I read the prologue, I really loved the story. I thought there was an interesting dynamic between the characters and the characters you created. What I mostly thought was interesting was the Master and Apprentice connection that you created between Athara and Vader. It makes a softer, more caring side to the Sith that we only really get to see at the end of Return of the Jedi. Your amazing writing also makes the interactions between Athara and the Original Trilogy characters completely believable. Usually, the author of a story would rush the ending of a story, or leave it open for interpretation. But it seems like you took your time to write the ending of the story, actually thinking about what might have happened. I love the Padme twist at the end- and the silent dynamic of love and pride that Anakin shares with Athara is almost perfect. Overall, I think it was a great story, and you should continue writing because you have some great ideas and storyline plot. I like that you stuck with the attitudes of the existing characters, even indulging in them to bend in our understanding of why they behave the way they do. You flawlessly inserted Athara in the events of the movies, and I almost see her in the background when I re-watch A New Hope. When I look back on this story, I love that Athara's character has developed and changed through the course of time, yet her character remains the same. A lot of authors forget to remember that during developing the character, they are still the same character. I love your story, and you should continue writing.
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