{{ contest.story_page_sticky_bar_text }} Be the first to recommend this story.
Hazel Meades would love your feedback! Got a few minutes to write a review?
Write a Review

My Hero

By Hazel Meades All Rights Reserved ©

Children / Adventure

Ransom

Crofton stared at the letter in disbelief. The paper shook in his trembling hands. It had been delivered on his doorstep not long ago and he'd already sent some of his men out to see if they could spot the intruder who'd left it. Just from glancing at it he'd known it was not a good sign. The seal was in the shape of a dagger and everyone knew what that meant. It was the sign of the Blue Mountains.

The Blue Mountains were a home for all robbers, gangsters and villains alike. They dwelled, like squabbling dragons, within a cave deep inside, standing vigilant over their stolen goods. The last honest person who went into the mountains had never returned and the bloodcurdling screams were enough to ward most sensible folk away. Unfortunately, Crofton's village was the closest to them and most frequently prone to attacks. He knew it was no mistake that this letter had been left for him. It was from a leader to a leader.

Crofton read the letter for the third time that morning.

Dear Crofton,

You are probably aware by now that your precious apprentice Jack is missing.

Crofton sighed, it was true. When he'd gone to check on his apprentice the bed had been empty. Jack had gone. At the time, Crofton had assumed that the boy had simply awoken early to do something useful, like help his mother tend to their farm, but when he had not returned by breakfast the old man had been unable to hide his concern.

This was by our doing. If you do not pay the following sum of a thousand gold pieces I'm afraid that my finger might slip and he will endure the most terrible fate known to mankind. So, if you want him back in one piece I suggest you hand over the loot before sundown.

Yours truly,

Scar

"What should I do?" wondered Crofton. "The Blue Mountain people do not make empty threats, especially their leader!"

A knock at the door stopped his thoughts in their tracks. The leader wearily walked over to answer it. Things simply couldn't get any worse.

He opened the door to see Prince Howard. The man stood as proud as ever, his blonde locks shining like melting butter in the sun.

"Heard there was a problem. Your guards found the culprit yet? Who the devil has taken him? Is there a ransom note?"

Crofton was startled by the young man's curiosity and enthusiasm. It gave him a headache. The man almost seemed glad that Jack was missing.

"Before I answer your questions let me ask you something. How do you know about all of this?" Crofton asked, sitting down at the bed.

"Oh Crofty! I'm a prince, I get around."

Crofton motioned for Howard to sit down and he joined the old leader at the bed.

"This was found on my doorstep." explained Crofton handing over the letter.

The prince examined it carefully, noting the seal before reading the message.

"Scar. I should've known!" he cried. "Don't worry Crofty; I'll get your apprentice back before you can say kidnapped!"

But this was what the leader had been afraid of, Howard may be brave but he never stopped to think.

"Prince Howard wait! Nobody has ever come out of there alive. How will you be any different?" Crofton asked. "Please at least take that clever servant of yours, James."

"Relax old man!" Howard snorted. "I'll be fine. I don't need a servant to help me with everything!"

Before Crofton could stop him the prince walked out of the room, his head held up high.

Continue Reading Next Chapter
Further Recommendations

CookieMonster911: The story overall was an adventure that is appealing to any age. The way the characters develop adds a more human characteristic to the novel. The writing style itself is amazing because you can learn every character's thoughts and emotions. The awkward love triangle and jerk moments adds to the ...

Meri Amber: The plot is creative, fun and addictive! The writing is superb and the characters are really well put together. Definitely highly recommeded!

Beau Bayot: I like the way the story is told and really engages the reader. In the daily life of a B17 Bomber Pilot that just happens to be a commander of an air-group, along with the hassles of keeping a bomber group running in peak performance during WW2. Banner should also consider himself lucky both at h...

kathylusk56: To be honest It has been a very long time in reading such a good story. I enjoyed evey one in the story.The writer gave great thought in creating their character. It was hard to not just keep going until the end was over but I would put it down every evening. I didn't want it to end too soon. ...

Erin Crowley: The concept here is really strong, but the execution is definitely lacking. Tenses, grammar, etc are all off, with at least one or more errors per 'Page' on my phone. The writing style is almost broken- sentences move into each other awkwardly, and are filled with an excess of "filler words", lik...

Hali McGowan: when will the third book be done? I am absolutely hooked. I red the first two books within less than a week. I'm itching for the third one. The plotline is absolutely wonderful. I've never been much for sci-fi ish books. but you've got me hooked on this series

aoifecollopy22: I loved how the author had the conflict come back later in the story. Also how they passed time without going over anything. That really helped move the story along. This kept my up for a few hours. YOU SHOULD READ THIS

Lorena Boothe: A few paragraphs in and I was immersed into a new world.I wasn't expecting that at all.I thought it might take a few more chapters for sure.Did I keep reading?You bet I did.I lost track of time until I had devoured this tale.Fun characters, awesome plot and lovely language. All I ever want in a b...

TheProfezzer: This is an excellent story. The plot covers several decades and at least two generations of good guys fighting the enemy from beyond. I found it hard to put down and read the second book after the first but you should red "the Origin of FORCE" first to keep the story in line. I just could not ...

More Recommendations

Jessica Esa: With a tantalising end to the first chapter, the authour has given us a treat and a welcome addition to the fantasy adventure genre. To limit it to just such would be an injustice however, as this novel clearly draws on elements of historical fiction, fairy tale and horror. Simply, there's someth...

Flik: Hi! ^.^ huge fan of yours on ff.net! When I saw the note about this contest on The Way We Smile, I couldn't help but rush over here, create an account, and vote! XD Seriously love this story and would recommend it to anyone! :D best FT fanfiction out there. Amazing story, amazing concept that wa...

cassandrab: Delightful SciFi (for a change)! I am not a SciFi fan: mostly the genre is far too dystopic for me. This book (written by a high-school friend) is, on the other hand, generally upbeat. Yes, Earth's future is threatened. But Earth has a chance to plan a response. And (spoiler alert) ultimately win...

nirrmitshah: A truely touching story where you'd be at the edge of your seat for the most time. even though the starting might seem rushed, the story was extremely interesting and entertaining. I think certain parts could be added detailing the Mynds's culture. As well as more details on the Jhanthru history....

Lydia Walters: I really enjoyed this novel. It gives us a view of what could be if we really tried.Also that there's nothing wrong with loving our LORD and our fellow humans. couldn't wait to get to each new chapter (mission). Thanks, Joe!

About Us:

Inkitt is the world’s first reader-powered book publisher, offering an online community for talented authors and book lovers. Write captivating stories, read enchanting novels, and we’ll publish the books you love the most based on crowd wisdom.