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Gray Ivory Orchid

By SkriegHev All Rights Reserved ©

Fantasy / Drama

Time is Limited

Ok, here's the thing. I want to tell you what is going on in this place. This place is really creepy. I don't know what i'm talking about but this is true. Yes, it's true. This is a rejection, Beautiful rejection in 1950s.

I almost forget to introduce myself. My name is Rick Slinkton. I'm from Merseyside who travelled to a country name Hindia. Just to make sure that Hindia is not India, two different countries. When i was there in 1950s, everything was so riot. They killed each other because of ideology, maybe? or about economy? i don't know. My wife said that we should go to China for our vacation but people said that Hindia is beautiful place and it has great coffee that comes from animal's feces. That's why i was really interested go to that place. But, it's not in the right moment at that time. Regret? nah, i am not regret that decision although i don't want to go back to that place anymore.

Why? here's the story. In 10 January 1954, i went to that place with my family. We came to that place with smile face and i thought that this was gonna be the best vacation ever. But, everything change when i went to place named "TYU". What is "TYU"? i don't know what is that and i don't know want to know that, ever. In that place, we drank that feces coffee. That sound disgusting but it taste good, really good. Then, there's a man came to us and ask us what do we want?

Honestly, i didn't know what do i have to say. That man was weird and strange. He said to us to go immediately because he didn't know what to do. I said that what the hell is going on, what do you want? what's the point? He said he was confused and he's gone away. After that, that place "TYU" exploded and i thought i died at the time because the bomb was so close to us.

20 January 1954, i was conscious and woke up, i looked everywhere, looked for my family. Then, i met nurse and i asked her

"Where's my family?"

"Oh, i don't know sir. I think your family leaves you here."

"What?! why?"

"I don't know again sir. maybe you're too funny for them"


"Yes, sir. They said you're too funny, you should go f*** yourself but that's confuse bla bla bla"

From that conversation with a nurse, i knew that my decision went to this place was wrong and boom! i didn't know what do i have to do.

After i went out from hospital, i wanted to back to England but the problem i didn't have much money. My family stole it from me and i didn't know do i have to mad or whatever, i was really abstract at the time.

Well, that's the end of this chapter. Another chapter will catch up again, i don't know when but my stories was crazy, cozy, and breezy. See ya

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