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The room was dark and rusting and wet. It was somewhere you wouldn't want to be caught in at any time in your life because if you were, you'd be in the position of the man sitting in the chair placed strategically in the center of the room, where a constant stream of dirty water rained down on him.
His hands were bound to the chair, and his feet were encased in concrete blocks.
He appeared to be unconscious, but upon further inspection seemed to be praying. His breaths were forced, and the fear he felt was other-worldly, squeezing his heart until the walls reverberated with its rapid beat.
He didn't stop praying until he heard the footsteps. Then he stopped, because the few breaths he had left in his life were unless no matter what he said.
She cleared her throat, and he began to tremble.
"I told you,
Don't cross me,
It always seems to end badly,
But you did,
Cause now you're tied up here,
Trembling just because I'm near."
Her voice was sweet and she sang very well. But there was that underlying tone only someone who's mind had escaped them had. It was a broken, maniacal tone that sent chills through the very walls. But that was her trademark. She always hand-wrote a song to her victims and sang it to them before she killed them.
This victim's song happened to be to the tune "This Old Man".
The sound of a blade singing from a sheath vibrated through the room, and soon the cold metal was slashed down the man's arm.
He whimpered as blood seeped out of the cut. Not deep enough to kill but just enough to give this girl the rush she wanted. The one that sent her spiraling into a place of darkness and pure emptiness harbored deep within her. This was where the illness grew.
"I could ask you if you know why you're here, but I find that cliche and useless." Her voice whispered into his ear softly. "You already know why."
The knife in her hand spun and stabbed him through his shoulder.
His screams were contained within the walls, and they melded with her almost inhuman laughing to create a sickly twisted symphony.
By the end of the hour, the girl was gone, the room was silent, and the grossly mutilated body of the unidentifiable male was left for the rats or the police, whichever came first.
The only clean part of his body was his left hand, severed from his body, resting in his lap, with a single name carved into it. A name the world had come to fear.
Ben Gauger: Kudos go to Karissa, author of Elements Of Engagement, an otherwise dark and twisted tale of love and workplace intrigue, very 'Fifty Shades of Grey' to be sure, her writing style being very graphic ad otherwise sexually-charged, hence the 'Fifty Shades of Grey' reference, and as for her use of g...
Jevron Macalino: You started the story after Chuck Vs. the Fake Name happened and I like your version more than I like the original one. The five or so episodes after the fake name should not have happened that is why I like your version better. I hope you will continue writing Chuck & Sarah's story from where y...
aeratheninja: Interestingly enough, this story touches on different psychological states and was very informing, on top of being a solid story. Although somewhat predictable, I thoroughly enjoyed reading this; I could feel the fear and the frustration of the characters, and was happy when they were happy.Even ...
Lea Sutherland-Doane: I love this story and it hurts me that it is on a cliff hanger. Please write the next story fast so I can enjoy more of your wonderful writing skills. Your writing skills are amazing and I cannot wait to read the sequel, I promise that this is the best book I have ever read and I love it will al...
ianwatson: The comedy is original and genuinely funny, I have laughed out loud many times reading this book. But the story and the plot are also really engaging. The opening two or three chapters seem quite character-dense but they all soon come to life and there is no padding, filling or wasted time readin...
Alex Reltin: This is a great story! I love how well you go into detail and emotions of Capri, and Mel. You have amazing dialogue and overall it's just a thrill to read!The only critique I could find is that some of the paragraphs should be separated. For example:-"If Nia would have just let me take the car an...
Deleted User: I've only read so far to the first two chapters, but I already get that thick, underlying meaning of dark romance--which is good, because it sets the tone, with a hint of danger. However, some parts of the writing did come across as a bit dull, and I personally think that starting a second chapte...
M.L. Bull: Hello, Aalia!Your story compelled the emotional pain and struggle of a teenage girl very well.. The imagery was also convincing and well-written, showing the different personalities of your characters and their actions. However, I do think that many of your sentences are too lengthy and could use...
FreakyPoet: "you made me laugh, made me cry, both are hard to do. I spent most of the night reading your story, captivated. This is why you get full stars from me. Thanks for the great story!"
Sara Joy Bailey: "Full of depth and life. The plot was thrilling. The author's style flows naturally and the reader can easily slip into the pages of the story. Very well done."