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Unwanted monster

By Devils_mess

Horror / Mystery

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"COME ON THEN!" I shouted out into the darkness, my cold voice bouncing off the walls around me. Standing in a disgusting ally with my head facing down, I silently waited for Them to creep out. The demons, lost souls you could call them. Before long cackling could be heard coming closer and closer, until I knew they surrounded me.

"Come on little girl. What's a tasty thing like you doing out here all alone?" Their scorning, scratchy voices whispered in my ears, the breath moving through my hair.

With a smirk on my rosy lips I rose my head, looking them each in the eye.

"Miss me boys?" I asked, sarcasm practically dripping from my voice. Their skeleton like bodies tensed, the leathery skin on their sunken faces tightening with fear.

"Athános! Y-You're not meant to be alive! He killed you!" One of the smaller demons spoke up, terror obvious in their every move. Grinning like a Cheshire cat I slowly walked around them each, lavishing the manic fear festering inside them.

"No, Sweetie, He simply banished me from Hell. I'm sure you know it was my father that killed me? Sent me to Hell? Yes? Good." Turning to face them all fully I clasped my hands together.

"Now, I know each of you ugly lot had a part in the torture I went through down there, so I'm sure you understand that I want revenge." With a wicked grin I allowed my features to change, my eyes became black with a gold pupil, two sets of canines grew elongated from my mouth and black veins appeared under my eyes. My grin widened as the demons all backed away from me and I chuckled lowly before launching myself towards them, burying my teeth in their necks and draining whatever it is that filled them dry.

Pulling away from the tenth and last demon I smirked and wiped my mouth, getting rid of the gooey black substance that now covered me.

A light wisp of wind sounded behind me, alerting me to a vampires presence. With all my hybrid features still on full display I span round, pinning the intruder against the ally wall, my hand against their neck. I snarled at them, opening my mouth before realizing who it was.

"Rebeckah?!" I asked stunned.

"Athános! Ath- I though your father killed you?! I saw you bloody die! How-" Rebeckah's blue eyes were wide, tears threatening to fall. With a sigh I moved away and lent against the wall opposite her.

"Hush Beckah, I'll explain. You already know I was a vampire/werewolf hybrid before I died. Father thought I was an abobination and took it upon himself to rid the world of such evil. Yes I died, I died and went to Hell itself." Frowning I paused, memories flooding my mind, until Beckah cut in.

"But you're alive! You're here! In front of me!" She still sounded shocked, oh she's such a drama queen I thought.

"Let's just say I was tortured by the demons, just like everyone who goes to Hell. Me being me I continued to insult the demons daily, and I refused to let my soul break. Eventually they grew annoyed with me and I was... referred to Lucifer. He attempted to break me, I pissed him off multiple times, and so since I couldn't go to Heaven he simply sent me back here and banished me from Hell. So basically I cant die now, and I have demon blood running through my veins now. They experimented on me." I muttered the last part at the look of confusion on her pale face.

"So basically, I died, pissed off the devil and came back. And now I'm a monster. A monster who no one wants to get close to incase I snap and kill them." I sighed sadly, the thought depressing my mind.

"Well then isn't it good I can't die Little bird?" A familiar voice rang out near me.

"Enzo?" I called in shock...

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