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Rites of Passage

By StormRiverSpell

Romance / Fantasy


Nessie POV

It has been years since that day when we almost got slaughtered by the Volturi. I remember it so clearly, even though I was so young. I remember the fear, the anticipation, and most of all, I remember all the guests we had. Our house was crowded, every room filled with people. They had all liked me and believed our story and if it wasn’t for them, our witnesses, we wouldn’t have had a chance.

I almost forgot, I haven't told you my story, or life for that matter, so here it goes:

My family is not an ordinary family. We are vampires, actually most of us are. I'm a half vampire, half human, a hybrid to be more specific. I am the product of a vampire father and a human mother. My whole family has incredible speed and strength. We are a coven of 9: my grandparents, Carlisle and Esme; my aunt Rosalie, who is married to Uncle Emmet; my aunt Alice, wife of my uncle Jasper; my mother, Bella, and my father, Edward. And last but not least, me: Renesmee Carlie Cullen.

I would like to briefly explain my relationship with all these people, a bit of context never hurts. Let's begin with grandpa Carlisle, he is very wise and smart, sometimes I get the feeling he knows everything about everything. He is a doctor, very impressive for a vampire, I know, but he's a great doctor. I look up at him, he is pretty much everything I could ask for as a grandfather. Most of the time we spend together, we talk pretty much about everything, from our life style, to literature, to what he does in the hospital every day. He is over 600 years old, so he’s seen a lot of history. We have a perfect grandparent-grandchild relationship, but to the rest of the house, he is the father figure.

Grandma Esme is more of an artistic person. She has decorated every room in our house. We spend our time painting and those sorts of things. A perfect grandmother, except for the fact that she looks like she could be my older sister.

Aunt Rosalie is like a second mother to me. She is constantly worrying about me, checking if I'm well fed, comfortable and so and so forth. Uncle Emmet is another story; he's my partner in crime. I could say that every bit of mischievousness I have was taught by him, and proudly.

Aunt Alice is just great. She may be really short, standing at 4’11”, but she is a tornado! She is in charge of the family's wardrobe and everything I wear is approved or picked by her. She's the one who takes me shopping, talks to me about friendships and that kind of stuff. We're friends. And I love her. Did I mention she can see the future? She has a special "gift" as we like to call it. She sees things that will or could happen depending on the person's decisions, but for some reason, she can't see my future.

Uncle Jasper and I have a very deep relationship, maybe because he also has a gift of his own: manipulating and feeling people's emotions. It's a very subtle gift. We spend a lot of time together. He has taught me everything I know about personal defense (much to my father's disapproval), and we just get each other. I don't really know why, but we do. He seems a little shy to any person who looks at him from an outside perspective, but I know him better than that. I know he loves Alice more than anything, he lives for her. And I also know that a good portion of his body is covered in scars from past battles against newborn vampires. Even though he comes from a very violent past, he’s managed to remain the most calm of our entire coven.

My mother and I have something I like to call a "modern relationship" because it's not like other people. For example, she doesn't order me to do anything, she suggests. We are both very independent so it's not really necessary anyway. I tell her everything about my life (not that there's much to tell since I only started going to school half a year ago), but yeah, she knows everything. There isn't really much I can say about her, but I know she loves me and my dad above all things. She also has a gift; it's a kind of shield. She seems to be able to block any gift from other vampires that have a psychological effect and she can extend that shield to other people too.

And last but not least, my dad. We have the most amazing father-daughter relationship I can imagine someone could have. And you know why? Because, we're not father- daughter. I like to think of us as buddies, friends, partners in crime. I learned my musical side from him. He plays the piano and has incredible taste in music. I learned how to play the piano when I was just a few months old. I remember I just sat on the bench one day and started playing the lullaby he wrote for my mother. He was delighted to say the least. I also play the guitar since I was 3 years old. I found my uncle Jasper's old guitar in the basement, and learned by myself. But back to my dad and me, we also talk about everything. He has taught me all my manners. He has the gift of reading people's minds. I learned over the years how to block my thoughts from him without him noticing, I can thank Alice for that, because it can be pretty annoying to have your dad inside your head.

Now, let's talk about me. I have curly hair the same color as my dad's, brown eyes like my mom's used to be, pale skin, but a little darker from the rest of my family, that sort of glows in the sunlight, and basically according to my family I'm incredibly beautiful. I have a gift that consists on transferring my thoughts to other people's minds by pressing my palms to their faces, but I've spent most of my life mastering how to control it because it can be very dangerous for my family if I accidentally reveal our secret to a human. I don't like it when people touch me or stare at me. I can sing quite well and dance. I love having friends and people to talk to, but I like being alone too. I'm an extrovert, but I'm also very calculative according to my dad. And I hate, note: HATE being called by my full name. It's not that I don't like it, because I really do, I don't feel comfortable with people calling me Renesmee al the time. So I prefer Nessie, or Ness. There’s also something very odd about me: I've never been in love, not even once. Maybe star crushes, but never with someone I know. 

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