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Breathe

By maggierocks

Fantasy / Adventure

The Leaving

Susan's POV

I looked back at him the one true man who understood me. The one true man who looks underneath my hair, eyes, and skin, he actually knows me. He smiles at my beauty on the inside not the outside. I know that it seems silly but looking at that tall, rugged, handsome man he makes my heart flutter with butterflies. I looked at the portal the rest of my family were about to walk through and back at Caspian X. He was holding back tears, not tears of joy but tears of sadness. Even though Caspian knew me I had to go back with my family.

Right before my left foot stepped through the portal my heart ached and my feet stopped. I just ignored my tugging heart to turn around but maybe I should have listened to it. Right when I stepped through I turned around and saw people hustling to the train some shoving me in the process. I can't believe I was looking into those big beautiful deep brown eyes just a few seconds ago.

My sister tugged at my skirt and I noticed I was wearing my uniform for school. I pulled Lucy into a huge hug and she squeezed me back tightly with her little arms around my waist. We had to get onto the train right that second or we would have missed it. Just like if I had turned around away from that portal seconds ago I would have Caspian in my arms.

Caspian's POV

Susan looked back at me with her dazzling beautiful blue eyes before she entered the portal. I let her go I let the most perfect girl slip right through my fingers into that other world she called home. Why would Aslan be so horrible knowing how much I loved her?

I know it sounds ridiculous that I love Susan after knowing her for a few months. I saw the rest of her precious family slip away from me but she was standing there a bit longer than the rest. But Susan she walked into that horrible portal. That portal ruined my life.

When the whole family walked through no one in the kingdom said anything. All of them looked up at me with heartbroken eyes. After a few minutes of silence I noticed Aslan was gone and I turned toward the kingdom.

I said smiling "Do not be heartbroken my friends please enjoy yourselves it is a party for Aslan's sake."

The whole kingdom lightened up and I finally heard chatter. Mostly the chatter was about Susan kissing me. But it was at least something. The music started playing and my good friend Trumpkin stood next to me.

Trumpkin put a hand on my back trying to reach my shoulder; he was standing on his tiptoes.

He said "Are you okay Caspian? I know they are near and dear to you especially Queen Susan."

I nodded with a fake smile on my face saying "Yes I am fine my good friend now go and enjoy the festivities." I pushed him into the dancing crowd and his little legs started dancing.

I turned my head back to facing where that portal was. I felt tears in my eyes; the Pevensies' were my family and were all I had, now their gone in that world. I held back tears to join a dance with a young lady around Peter's age. I know if I had said something from my family walking through I would be a happy man dancing with Susan.

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