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Mount Fortain

By Kingbicy

Fantasy / Action

Chapter 1

Many people wonder what other places are like. They wonder about the climates, surroundings, and the origins of that place. Fortain was just like any normal place except it had a rocky mountain behind it. There were normal people, two story buildings, and it wasn't that big of a town but it wasn't small. In this town, there was a 15 year old boy named Jack. He was just like any other normal person. He had short black hair that didn't go over his eyes, an average skinny body, brown eyes, a long sleeve white shirt, blue jeans, and black shoes. He was heading out of his home near the mountain when he was stopped by his parents. "Where are you heading Jack?" his mom asked. "I'm just going to hang out with my friends. I'll be back later," Jack answered. "All right, have fun," Jack's dad said as he watched tv in the living room. Then Jack ran out of the house. He ran down the rocky path through the town. While he ran, he saw many people that he knew. The sun shined down like it did any other day. When he got to the town entrance, he saw his two friends waiting under a tree. " Yo, Jack," the boy called out. The 15 year old boy that called out was Antoine. He had dark skin but not too dark, short red hair, brown eyes, a short sleeve red shirt, and black pants. He was a little more musclar than Jack but they were the same height, 5 feet and 4 inches. Jack's other friend was a 15 year old girl named Lily. She has long blonde hair that ran down here neck, a silver necklace, light blue eyes, a white short sleeve shirt with red outlines, a purple skirt, and white shoes. "Hey guys," Jack greeted. "Hey," said Lily. "What do you guys want to do?" Jack asked. "We could go to the movies," Lily suggested. "All right," Antoine said. "But before we go, I want to fight you Jack." "Why?" Jack asked. "I'm not letting that last fight go. I want a rematch," said Antoine. "Ok, but you're still going to lose," said Jack. The three friends left the town and went to an open field near Fortain. When they got there, Lily backed away to watch. The two boys got some space between each other. They looked at each other like they were born rivals. Then, they charged at each other.

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