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Ayame Melma stood outside of the Jedi Temple. Her long brown hair shone in the sun as her hazel eyes scanned the humongous four-tiered building. She had been sent there at the request of her parents. They had noticed unusual things about her as a child, so they wanted her tested. "They really think that I could be a Jedi?" she thought. "Well, they must if they sent me here." Then, two Jedi strode out of the tall double doors. The taller one had shoulder-length brown hair and soft brown eyes. His beard was neatly trimmed and was spread with a kind smile as he walked toward Ayame. The shorter had cropped brown hair and bright blue eyes. Ayame noticed that he had the apprentice's long braid that was a signature in the Order hanging over his shoulder. Both of them were dressed in the cream tunic and pants, long brown robe, and brown boots of the Jedi Order. The taller of the two walked up to her.
"You must be Ayame. I am Qui-Gon Jinn," he said, smiling. Ayame, realizing that he was of a higher rank, bowed to him.
"I am honored, Master Qui-Gon," she said, using the term that Padawans use for their masters and elders. Qui-Gon was impressed.
"You are versed in our ways already. That is good." Then, he turned to the young man standing next to him. "This is my apprentice, Obi-Wan Kenobi."
"It's a pleasure, Obi-Wan," Ayame said, bowing to him as well. Obi-Wan, while impressed, decided to test her.
"Why in the world are you bowing to me?" he said. Ayame just looked at him.
"I'm a youngling, you're a Padawan...you have the higher rank, so it's a sign of respect to you," she replied, surprised that he would ask something like that. Obi-Wan, though he didn't show it, was impressed even more. Satisfied, he stepped back. Qui-Gon took Ayame by the arm and led her inside.
"Come," he said. "The Council is waiting for you." As they walked through the massive halls, Ayame was amazed at the space and regality. As they walked past the library, Ayame stopped dead. It was huge! She had never seen a library that big before. There were shelves upon shelves of data and things, and statues and busts of great Jedi from the past. Qui-Gon noticed her amazement.
"We'll have time to explore after we meet with the Council," he whispered in her ear. She nodded and continued on behind the two Jedi. As they got closer and closer to the Council chambers, Ayame started to get more and more nervous.
"What will happen if I really don't have the Force? What will they say to me?" she thought. Qui-Gon could sense her nervousness.
"You're going to be fine, I'm sure," he said to her. "Ah, here we are." They stopped at a pair of gray doors. Ayame straightened her simple dress before the three of them walked into the Council Chambers. They walked into a circular room with windows on almost every side. Outside, the sun was beginning to set on Courescant. Ayame drew her focus back to the Jedi Masters that were looking at her. All of them had solemn expressions on his or her face. Then, her eyes were drawn to a little green creature sitting at what seemed to be the front of the room. Ayame could feel some sort of force radiating from him. It was radiating from everyone present, but he was the strongest source of it. She watched as Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan bowed to the little green creature. "Master Yoda, we have brought the girl that you said would come," Qui-Gon said. The little creature, whom Ayame figured was Yoda, nodded.
"Come forward, child," he said in a high-pitched, gravelly voice. Ayame obeyed and walked to the center of the room. Following Qui-Gon's example, she bowed to Yoda. When she rose, she saw another Jedi, a bald man with dark skin, studying her. She was about to ask who he was when Yoda spoke again. "A great connection with the Force, you have," he said. Ayame was amazed.
"You can tell that?" she asked him. He chuckled and nodded. Then, he turned to the other Master that had been studying her.
"Master Windu, if you would." Master Windu pulled out a small display screen.
"I am going to project an image onto the screen. However, you will not see the image. Using the Force, you will try to tell what the image is." He looked at the screen and then looked at Ayame. She reached out with the Force, or at least she tried, and tried to focus on the screen. In her mind, she saw the clear picture of a sand speeder.
"It's a sand speeder," she said. Master Windu nodded. She went on to identify a Naboo fighter ship, a Republic cruiser, a model X podracer, and a trophy cup from the last podrace on Tatooine. This amazed the Council. No raw recruit had ever gotten that specific. She had a gift...one that they had never seen before. So, Yoda decided to test her even more.
"Follow me," he said to her. They went into one of the training rooms. Yoda went and sat down in a corner, while the rest of the Council sat around the room. "See if you have skills with a Lightsaber, we will. Obi-Wan, fight her, you will." Obi-Wan bowed and retrieved two training sabers from a small bin. He threw one to Ayame and got in a ready position. Ayame copied his position and activated the blade. She suddenly felt something flow through her as the blue blade hummed to life. Obi-Wan came at her, moving with speed and agility. Ayame matched his attacks move for move. Eventually, Obi-Wan found himself defending more than attacking. After a few more minutes, Ayame knocked the weapon from her opponent's hands and knocked him to his knees. Holding the Lightsaber at his throat, she smiled.
"You fought well, Obi-Wan," she said, and removed the weapon from his throat. Deactivating it, she helped Obi-Wan up, and bowed to him. He, in return, bowed to her, amazed at what she had just done. Both of them faced the Masters, all of whom were showing looks of amazement on their faces. Even Yoda was surprised. But, before he could get a word out, there was a blast from above and somebody came crashing through the roof. He was dressed in full body armor and had a jetpack his back. He held up a blaster and aimed it at Obi-Wan.
"Youre going to die, Kenobi! he said.
"NO!" Ayame yelled and pushed Obi-Wan out of the way. She held out her hand and willed him to stop. Instead, there was a flash as blue lightning flew from her fingertips. The man was thrown against the wall and knocked unconscious. Ayame froze and stared at her hands. From what she read, only Sith were supposed to have this power. While two members of the Council took the man away, Ayame turned around and faced the rest of them.
"I...I...I'm sorry...I didn't try to do it...I swear...I..." she studdered, and started to cry. Qui-Gon walked forward and knelt down to face her.
"We know you didn't mean to," he said softly. Ayame looked at him, tears running down her face.
"You probably want me to go now, huh?" she asked. Yoda walked up to her.
"On the contrary, you to stay, we want," he said. "We've never seen a recruit with as much power in the Force as you," Master Windu said. "We would like you to stay for both your safety and benefit. We can teach you to hone your skills so that you can control them. The only question is...who will train you?"
"Train her, I will," Yoda said. Everyone in the room stared at him. Obi-Wan was especially surprised.
"Master Yoda hasn't taken an apprentice for almost 600 years," he thought. "Why is he taking this girl?" Ayame was also surprised.
"Master Yoda...I don't know what to say..." she said. Then she knelt and bowed her head. "You honor me by taking me as your apprentice...my Master," she said. And with that, her training as a Jedi began.
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