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The Raven

By Lizk43

Fantasy / Romance

Chapter: 1

"Father, this plan will benefit all of the other factions. Why are you not bringing it up in the counsel?" I ask as I sit at the table looking at the paper that I was holding in my hand as Father and I were talking.

"Because Erudite is already breathing down our neck, sweety. If we try anything then they will try and take action." Father says, taking the paper from me and setting it down. "This was a great plan Nevara and I am proud that you came up with it, but right now isn't the time to bring up something like this up." He says and gives me a fond, proud smile. "Now go and get your hair cut, I am sure your Mother is almost done with Beatrice's then you have to all head off to school."

"Alright Father." I say and get up from my spot, lightly kissing him on the cheek before walking to the hallway where I see Mother pinning back Beatrice's hair.

"Nevara, I was just about to come and get you. Come on and sit." Mother says after a minute as Beatrice gets off the chair and I nod, taking my seat on the chair. As soon as I sit down in the chair my Mother lightly starts taking my hair and slowly cutting it. "Are you afraid for the test today?" She asks me softly.

"No Mother I am not. Were you?" I reply just as softly and she smiles at me through the mirror.

"No I wasn't scared, I was terrified."

"Well you made the right choice, didn't you?"

"Of course I did Nevara, if I hadn't of made this choice then I wouldn't have met your Father and had my 3 wonderful children. Now what ever your test results are it doesn't matter to your father and I, as long as you are happy it doesn't matter. The same goes for that faction you choose, it doesn't matter and we will do everything to support you fully."

"Thank you Mother." I say and she nods before kissing my cheek.

"It is no problem." She says while she finished up cutting my hair and pinning it back as usual. "Now it is time to go, otherwise you, Beatrice and Caleb will be late."

"I will see you later mother." I say and kiss her cheek before walking out of the house where Beatrice and Caleb were waiting for me. "Are you both ready?"

"Yes we are Nevara, lets go or we will miss the bus." Caleb said and we started walking to the bus stop, when we got there we patiently waited as everybody got on before us. When we got on the bus Beatrice and I sat down next to Caleb who always sat on the end to give others his seat if need be. We were on the bus for about 20 minutes before we pulled up to the Candor stop where a bunch of people wearing all white and black got on, as usual my brother got out of his seat and an older gentlemen from Candor took his spot.

Caleb has always been the 'perfect' Abnegation, or at least that is what everybody else thinks. I can see through this, I see that on the inside Caleb values knowledge and less selflessness he just plays a good game. I have seen his room and just like all rooms it his the bare minimum when it comes to furniture, but I see in his room random stacks of books on his desk and even some under his bed so it would be considered 'selfish' for how many books he has. My parents I have noticed have the largest hope that I will stay in Abnegation then Caleb then Beatrice, they think I have the largest potential for in the test I will receive Abnegation.

We get off the bus and slowly walk into our school building, we start up the stairs and soon come to the large room where later we will all wait to be called for our testing. In this room you nearly only see blobs of color as each faction only talk and stay by each other.

"Have a good day you two, I will see you at lunch before the test." Caleb says before walking away to his first class as Beatrice and I start towards Faction History.

"Are you scared of the test Nevara?" Beatrice asks as we walk slowly down the hall.

"No, we can't stop what we are going to get so why be worried. It will suggest to you which faction would be best for you. Just because you get one faction doesn't mean that you have to go there Beatrice, just make sure that your choice was the right one." I say and continues walking to class while Beatrice stops to watch the Dauntless arrive.

We were all sitting in the lunch room waiting to be called for the test. As I was sitting there I noticed that most people were sitting and talking with there friends in the factions, but not us Abnegation we were just sitting in silence as we watched everybody else, most were looking for a way to help somebody else.

"Caleb Prior, Nevara Prior, Beatrice Prior and Susan Black." A lady calls and we all stand up and make our way to where she was, we walk into the back hall. "each of you sit in a chair in the order that I called you." She says and we all sit down. "Wait for your name to be called then go in." She says again before leaving to call the next group for the next set of chairs that are empty.

"Beatrice, stop bobbling your foot up and down everything is going to be fine." I say while lightly putting a hand on her thigh to stop the bouncing.

"Sorry Nevara." She mutters, looking down.

"It is fine but you need to calm down." I reply in a calm and soothing tone like usual.

"You know that I can't do that."

"Then try." I mutter just as the door opens and a black haired Dauntless women steps out of the room.

"Caleb Prior." She calls and Caleb gets up and follows her into the room, closing the door behind himself.

"Your next Nevara." Beatrice mutters and I send her a smile.

"I know, dear sister and everything is going to be alright." I say and that is the last word I say before Caleb comes out and my name is called. I walk into the room and see the Dauntless women already setting up to administer the test.

"I am Tori I will be delivering the test to you." She says before looking up at me to see that I am look at her. "Well most Abnegation look at the mirror instead of looking at me, I don't really know why." Tori says and I smile at her.

"Because looking in the mirror is vanity." I reply and she nods.

"Well I see that you live by the rules." She says and I shrug a little while sitting down, thinking 'I helped draft most of the rules since I was 8 anyways.'

"Most of the time, but only out of respect." I reply and she nods before handing me a cup with a blue serum in it.

"Drink it." Is all she says and I knock my head back and down it all in one shot. "Alright well just go through the tests like you normally would and you will get the answer of where you should be when you are done." Tori says before I close my eyes.

When I reopen my eyes I see that I am back in the room of the test but this time Tori isn't there and neither is the rest of the equipment, it is only me and the chair that I have now gotten up from and it soon vanished. I turned and looked around the room a little more when all of a sudden 2 bowls appear one with cheese in it and the other had a large knife in it.

"Choose." I hear a women's voice from behind me but when I turn I don't see anybody. "Choose." It says again but I look at both of the objects and I choose not to choose, knowing that I would be able to face what ever it was on my own. "Have it your way then." She says and the bowls disappear and in it's place a large angry looking dog appeared, it started stalking towards me and I decided to try something that might not seem ethical but who and I to really judge. I kneeled down in front of the dog and stretched out my hand and the dog stepped forward and leaned his head into my hand. I opened my mouth to say something when I heard another voice next to me, when I looked up I saw a small boy that looked about 6 making his way towards me clapping his hands happily.

"Doggy, Doggy, Doggy! Can I pet the doggy?" The boy asks excitedly and before I can reply there is a loud growling noise from in front of me and I turn back to the dog and see him barring his large teeth. The next thing I know I see the dog charging forward and the boy turns around and starts trying to run away desperately but I know that he couldn't get away on his own. I get up and run towards the dog and tackle him to the ground, knowing that that was the only way the 'boy' could survive.

The next thing I notice that I am now sitting on a bus, like the one that I take home everyday and the one that I take to school. I stand holding onto the railing in front of me but I don't know why because it is only me and some other guy reading the news paper. On the front page there is a giant picture of a man with a long beard.

"Do you know this man?" The man from behind the news paper asks closing it and pointing to the picture. I know that I recognize the man from somewhere, but from what I don't know but what I do know is that if this was real I would tell the truth.

"I am sorry sir, but I do recognize the man but I have no idea what from. But if I had any idea of where I would most certainly tell you." I answer and the man from behind the news paper smiles at me kindly.

"Thank you for your honesty." He replies and the next thing I know I am sitting back in the test room with Tori looking at me completely shocked.

"H-How did you do that?" She asks in a shocked voice before pulling me out of the chair and leading me towards the back door.

"Do what?" I ask in a somewhat confused tone, but I already think I know what is happening but I want to be sure.

"Your test, this has never happened before. There have been cases that people have two possible factions three at the most but certainly not all five. You fit in every single one, this is very dangerous Nevara people will try and kill you if they find out. Don't tell anybody about your test results and if you have to tell them that you got Dauntless because I put that into the computer manually because from what I see that is the one that your fit in most." She says before pushing me out the back door. "Wait here, if I am right your sister will probably be one also. I will tell them that you both went home sick if I am right if not then just you." She says before closing the door and I am left alone in the back hallway. About 8 minutes but what seems like 20 the door opens again and Tori is standing there with Beatrice.

"What are my test results?" Beatrice ask, well more like demands.

"They were.... inconclusive just like your sisters." Tori says, motioning towards me. "You could fit in Abnegation, Dauntless and Erudite."

"But how is that possible, this test was suppose to tell me where I belong and not confuse matters for me." Beatrice says and I slight roll my eyes at her because my choice really is a lot more difficult then hers is.

"Not as hard as your sisters, who fits in all of the factions. Now go before somebody comes to check up on you, if anybody asks you were both sent home sick because of the serum." She says before closing the door on us.

"Come on Beatrice, lets go home." I say and start walking down the hall and I hear her follow me as we start descending the step to the elevators.

"What are we going to do Nevara?" Beatrice asks and for one of the few times in my life I say,

"I don't know."

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