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By navy99

Action / Romance

Chapter 1

Tris pov

'Hey tris!' screams Uriah. I turn around and see him on the other side of the cafeteria.

'We're going zip lining. Wanna come along?' He says walking towards me. I can feel fours' eyes on me.

I've never really done it before. But then I've really never been dauntless before either, so I nod my head slowly and smile.

I don't know why this concerns me but I yet ask him 'Who all are coming?'

He gives me toothy grin, which leaves me puzzled. He continues to say 'Marlene, zeke, Shauna and I, and well FOUR.'

He seems to emphasize on the word four and I try my hardest to keep a straight face but I feel the edges of my lips curve up a little

I almost don't realize that I haven't said anything to Uriah and I had gotten lost in fours thoughts. I try to shake them away from my mind. Uriah clears his throat and says 'Well I'll leave you to your daydreams. Just don't get into them too deep cause we won't wait for you at the tattoo parlor too long.'

He runs off before I can come up with a good come back and I go to my dormitory thinking that I have to change into something comfortable for zip lining. But I really know that I'm dressing for four.

Uriah pov

Zeke's gonna kill me. I lied to tris that Four was coming. Just to see her expression but now im in trouble because four's never going to agree to come for zip lining unless zeke can help me. So after talking to tris I sprint to Zeke's apartment only to find him doing the most disgusting thing

He and Shauna were cleaning his apartment and it is the most disgusting thing to see what you can find in the heap of trash on zekes apartment floor.

I pinch my nose and let out an inhuman sound only to get death glares from Zeke.

He walks up to me and growls and says 'What does my little, annoying brother want now.'

'If its paintballs I'm out of them'

'No actually it's about zip lining' I say.

'What about it' says Shauna.

'Is my little brother scared of heights' says Zeke picking up a dirty sock up from his floor

'No' I say scowling at him.

'It's just that I had gone to invite Tris, a transfer initiate to go zip lining with us and she asked who all were coming.'

'So' says Zeke looking at me questioningly.

'I caught her staring at Four and I wanted to see her reaction when I said he was coming. So I told her he was.'

When I turn up my gaze from the floor to Zekes and Shauna's expression I see them smiling.

'Uriah are you sure she's got a thing for four?' askes Shauna

I nod my head looking a bit confused. Shauna starts clapping and a grin spreads to both her ears.

'But how does that matter' I ask quizzically.

'Me and Zeke think Four has a thing for Tris' exclaims Shauna.

'But it's not going to be easy to convince Four to come along' Says Zeke.

'But now that we know they like each other we so have to set them up' says Shauna hardly containing her excitement.

Zeke sighs 'Well if I have to persuade four I better go to his apartment'

Fours/Tobias pov

I'm walking back to my apartment from the cafeteria after breakfast. I felt warmth when Tris's eyes were on me but I saw her talk o Uriah and blush and now I feel a helpless and hopeless.

I hear someone call out my name and turn to find Zeke running towards me.

'Sup bro' I ask him

His eyes widen and he asks me 'Where did you learn that from'

I feel heat running up to my cheeks as I heard Will say this to Al and I thought if I ever had to get a girl like Tris I'd need to get "updated".

'I doesn't matter ' I reply

'Well I came here to tell you we were leaving for zip lining in about 5 minutes. We'll be meeting everyone at the tattoo parlor.' Says Zeke.

'I never said I'd come for Zip lining' I retort back

Zeke seems to wait and think for a moment and finally decides to say 'Well I just presumed that you were because one of the girls… Transfer initiate girls asked about you. What was her name…..'

When I heard an a girl was asking about me I thought it would be one of the girls who throw themselves at me but when Zeke said transfer initiate my heart beat tripled its normal rate and I finish his sentence for him '…Tris!'

And then when I see a Zeke smirk I realize that I had been an idiot blurting out her name like that and then I knew for sure he would never stop teasing me for this even after me and tris get together. If we do that is. I've got to stop thinking like this about her. I expected him to run of to tell Shauna about this but instead he continued to say.

'Well I don't really remember her name but if you want to know you have to come with.'

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