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Waiting

By bravelove

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Waiting

I don't know how many moons it has been, waiting on the border to catch a glimpse of my love. I waited and waited but her sister would never let her come near. Waiting, waiting, waiting. I heard many stories. Every once and a while a she-cat would come from farther in the forest asking if I was ready to join them. I refused every time. One day I would see my love. I would wait for a thousand moons just to get a glimpse of her pure white coat. I saw Brokenstar arrive and raced into the forest without the cats inside even having to ask. I saw Tigerstar arrive and when the cat asked he went with her. I saw Darkstripe arrive and saw him follow Tigerstar. Waiting, waiting, waiting. I saw Hawkfrost arrive and joined his father. Waiting, waiting, waiting.

One day a meeting was called between the Dark Forest and Starclan to decide the fate of a cat. Me, Brokenstar, and the she cat in the forest met with Snowfur. Bluestar. and Spottedleaf. In between them was a grey cat apparently named Ashfur. After hearing what he did, I asked "Why does this cat need a chance to join Starclan."

Snowfur could not look me in the eyes when she replied "He only loved too much."

I jumped up bristling and replied "He took one of Firestar's lives, and nearly killed 3 cats, one was a medicine cat!"

Spottedleaf sighed"He did it for love, why should he be punished for it?"

This time Tigerstar jumped up and snarled"Love is a pathetic excuse for anything, he should join our ranks, he has chosen the path of vengeance! You only are considering him so he won't swell our ranks"

Bluestar sighed "While you have a point he only attempted to kill them and regretted it in death. His only flaw was a fragile heart"

The she cat lashed her tail in anger "So he regretted it huh? If Darkstripe regretted following Tigerstar when he died, would he be let in? He killed many cats guilt free for Tigerstar and poisoned a kit!"

Spottedleaf looked the she-cat in the eye and replied "If I believe he regretted it I would let him in."

I couldn't take this and snarled "And I didn't love to much?! I never killed anyone! I died defending the Riverclan border. A thing Bluestar seemed to neglect doing when she was a warrior. I was always loyal to Thunderclan! And Bluestar took everyone I loved away! She got you killed Snowfur! Took Whitekit from me and slandered my name! I'm only not in Starclan because you couldn't stand me being with your sister. The queen I love with all my heart!" I unsheathed my claws and lunged at Bluestar, "YOU TOOK EVERYTHING FROM ME, MY ONLY SHOT AT HAPPINESS! MY FUTURE! I-" a flash of white appeared in my vision and I quickly sheathed my claws as I knocked over Snowfur, who jumped in front of her sister.

She looked at me with pain in her eyes "Thistleclaw...you've changed. The Dark Forest changed you, you were never this battle thirsty."

I backed off, tail tucked behind my legs "Compared to what this cat we're deciding on has done, that was nothing, Snowfur...please see reason. You are a smart cat, see Ashfur doesn't deserve to be in Starclan."

Snowfur took a deep breath and said calmly "No. He deserves a chance to redeem himself he truly regrets his actions, you do not. Which is why he gets to be in the stars."

She turned around, guiding the grey tom into Starclan's territory as the other Star clan cats follow.

I felt my heart break, Snowfur...the one I loved...had betrayed me.

I turned to the she-cat that asked me to enter the forest and hissed my final answer with pain in my eyes "I am ready to join."

The she-cat smiled "My name is Mapleshade, let's make Starclan pay for every gift given to others and ripped from us."

I followed her into the forest, Starclan would pay for this hypocrisy. Snowfur's cruelty had hardened my heart beyond healing. I was done waiting. It was time for action, and she would regret what she had done.

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