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Allegiant: How it Should have Ended

By truebluedez

Romance / Adventure

Tris

“I didn’t come here to steal anything, David.”

I twist and lunge toward the device. The gun goes off and pain races through my body. I don’t even know where the bullet hit me.

I can still hear Caleb repeating the code for Matthew. With a quaking hand I type in the numbers on the keypad.

The gun goes off again. I think I have reached my pain threshold, or possibly it’s just the adrenaline running through me because this time I don’t feel the bullet hit me.

I start to fall, and slam my hand into the keypad on my way down. A light turns on behind the green button. I hear a beep and a churning sound.

As I slide to the floor, my vision blurring, I turn and notice a slumped figure behind David. It’s Caleb, a gun held in his shaking hand. I keep myself awake long enough to hear his last words.

“I’m sorry, Beatrice,” he says, his voice barely audible, “I love you.”

I watch him take his last shaky breath before blacking out.


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