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Divergent, the next generation.

By wolfgirl4321

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Chapter 1

‘You are never weak if you have a brave heart… if you do then you are the strongest person alive.’

I feel a rush of pain run down my spine. He knocks me to the ground, when I say knocked I don’t mean ‘Oh sorry, didn’t see you there, let me help you up.’ No it’s not like that. I mean he punches my face. His fist slits my check and I feel my cool blood trickle down my neck. Great, Blood. I think. I hear my friends giving me support, telling me that I need to win this fight to be first, telling me that I need to get up. I wanted to prove that I was just as strong as my aunt and my brother. Toby (He moved to Dauntless but goes by a different name, Luke, don’t even ask me why he changed it.’ He wasn’t smart like me so he left Erudite for Dauntless. I joined Dauntless to prove my family wrong, even though my mother had faith in me until recently.

A kick brings me back to reality. I groan in pain and look up to see his face. Riley. So far he was the best, Dauntless – born and transfers. I aim to beat him. He knows that I’m trying. He doesn’t try and I know he doesn’t want to win but he has got good luck. He’s good – looking and smart and he has followers. People who look weak compared to him are scared of him. He was tall and full of muscles. He had short brown hair with deep blue eyes with you could get lost in. his black Dauntless clothing brings out his deep tanned skin. I was weak but mother had told me once. ‘You are never weak if you have a brave heart… if you do then you are the strongest person alive.’ I loved that saying but it hasn’t helped me in this fight.

‘Come on, get up.’ Christina screams into my bloody ear. She believed I have true potential. I slowly get up to face Riley. The blood runs down his face. One of his eyes was swollen. My doing? I thought to myself. We move closer to each other, his hair shined whenever the light caught it. He looks at me and I take a swing to his face. He knew what I was going to do but doesn’t move. He lets himself get hit. After my punch, a kick shortly follows it. I still hear the screams of people supporting me but I also hear Riley’s friends to take me down. Basically killing me.

I punch him again and this time I cut his lower lip. He is not trying to fight me so my guess is that he wants me to win stage one. Fine by me. His deep blue eyes keep taunting me. I punch him twice more, putting everything into my punches. I knock Riley to the floor, once again not, ‘Oh so sorry.’

He doesn’t move after a couple of seconds. A smile creeps up on Christina’s face and declares me the winner. I saw Riley smile before they took him to the hospital. Something seriously wrong with that boy.

My friends come to congratulate me. Jenieve and Finn. There are twins from my old faction. Finn is braver then Jenieve but she is stronger. They look the same but Finn has light green eyes whereas Jenieve has liquid Hazel eyes. Pretty. I glance over my shoulder to Davie, names sound dumb right, but that’s not what he is called here. Here he is known as Chase. I don’t even know why he is called Chase but he has bleached blonde hair with eyes with are grey and show only coldness.

Next to Chase was Will. Yeah he or Riley didn’t change their name, well I don’t think they did anyway as from came from Candor. Anyway, Will was staring at me. He never liked me and I don’t even know why. He was always weird around me. It’s like he wants to see my inside organs. Dudes got issues.

‘Well done.’ I hear people say around me. I looked to Luke and Christina. Their discussing my rankings. My best friends Jenieve and Finn comfort me. They know I have issues with fighting people. Something happened in my past. No. I’m not going to talk about it, to many… gruesome memories to remember.

The door opens as far have it will go and a tall, broad man walks through the door. His muscles are too big for his tight-fitted shirt. His tanned skin looked darker in the pit than what it should do and his short brown hair cut the way Abnegation would cut it. He had a straight face and a small beard growing around his mouth. He was in his late 30s, early 40s and he face was familiar around here. He was one of the greatest Legends dauntless had ever had. He walks steady and straight with a firm stride, every step he takes is faster than the other. He marches over to Christina and Luke, whispers things to them and they nod. The muscled man embraces my brother, Luke, for some reason.

‘So, you’re like the winner, umm… well done.’ Mack says to me. I didn’t even realize that he was there. Mack was a quiet boy, help to stick up against riley and his friends. I heard that he was offered to join their group but he turned it down. He had blonde hair and brown eyes. His face was all always emotionless but you know deep down he cares for the weak ones here.

I smile politely at him. God those eyes. I think. So dreamy. He smiles back at me and joins Rob. Rob is going to be Factionless. Shame. Rob is a nice guy. He came from Abnegation. Riley and his mates call him Stiff.

‘Hey guys.’ I say as I walk over to Jenieve and Finn. Jenieve touches my cut check and shakes her head. ‘What.’ I say but before she could answer, the muscled man shouts to address everyone.

‘Listen up.’ All initiates turn to face him. ‘My name is Four.’ Some people laugh but most know that anyway. ‘I’ll will also be a trainer for stage two.’ A girl, Johanna, raises her hand and he nods at her.

‘What is stage two?’ she asks quietly.

‘Going through your fear landscape. Facing your fears.’ He says to us like the question was never asked. Dang. I think.

‘Lunch.’ Luke shouts over the mutters. As I past him, he stops me. He waits till everyone has gone to the pit. Well everyone apart from Christina and Four.

‘What.’ I say to him.

‘Will you be okay going through your fear landscape? He asked.


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