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The Darkness Within

By Megan Done

Fantasy / Adventure

Prologue

“Are you ready for this?'”

“Are you?”

“Not sure but we're almost there so there is no turning back now.” A woman's head turned to view the sandy brown planet that was creeping closer as the seconds ticked by. Soon she would be on the land again, yet this time it was for another reason than searching for the Star Map. She felt the man come up beside her and her shoulders slightly drooped feeling comfort from his presence. It had seemed that ever since that final battle they had grown even more inseparable, through both grief and a budding romance. At least she hoped for the second part. There was also the fact that the galaxy was not yet safe and this was a cleanup job.

She knew he had been hesitant to come as the last time he was also on the planet he had come face to face with the son he had long thought dead. The reunion certainly hadn't been pleasant but hopefully through the reconnaissance his son had done this mission would be easier and then they could return to Coruscant for a few months and disappear. She swung her hand back imperceptibly but enough to graze his letting him know that she was there for him.

Their trust was still fragile but growing stronger every day they had spent around each other after learning her dark secret. She could often catch him staring at her, calculating her, watching her every move making sure she didn't show a hint of her former self. Deep down he didn't understand her internal battle. Both the light and dark sides of her had reared themselves and deep inside her there was still a struggle between the two. She openly professed that she was of the light and that the dark would never return, but one should never say never. Glimpses into her previous life helped feed the dark beast and sometimes she would wake at night drenched in sweat, panting, praying that the dark side no longer consumed her soul.

Through the revelation of her original being, it was hard not to combat with the light and dark and wonder what exactly had made her realize that true depth of the darkness within her. There were memories she would never get back and the two other beings that could have helped her understand were dead. Struck down by her hand. But it was for a cause of the light. To let the jedi once again have peace come over the galaxy, but could a galaxy so vast really have perpetual peace? There would always be another person, consumed with darkness and greed and power who would want to use it and throw their fist.

But now she was cleaning up the mess her own hand had made. How consumed she must have been by the darkness to turn hundreds of the light towards the dark and make them humiliate themselves for something they would never achieve. Those who tried would never finish, they would wind up dead within an ancient tomb or catacomb, killed by a fellow student of the dark. Thanks to Bastila hopefully she could now rewrite part of her own history and write of her redemption from the darkness.

Her name would forever haunt her. Rarely did she go by her original name. It caused fear and admiration, neither of which she wanted. Her new name was celebrated as a great defender of the galaxy and a person who helped stop the sith usurpation of the galaxy. People of course still recognized her, but upon telling them her new name, she would see them stop the questions they surely wanted to ask and just thanked her instead.

It had taken the man next to her longer than just a new name to make him stop asking questions and he routinely would ask her questions. What she remembered, how she had become so strong to fight against the very evil she had created and she would always ask him in return if he could ever trust her. He would look at her diligently before saying a gruff yes and walking away. It hurt sometimes when he did that. But she couldn't fault him. She had in a round about way caused the death of his first wife and the separation from his son for many years and the destruction of his home planet. So much evil yet he stood by her in times like these, which made her hopeful of what they could be.

“Captain Onasi, we're approaching a landing dock. We've received no resistance as of yet and are making the final approach. The two flanking ships are also beginning their landing processes.” a soldier said approaching them. Both nodded at the soldiers words and watched as the commander ship began to land on the barren sith planet of Korriban.


This is a new story! Hope you all enjoy. Revan will be a female character since this is inspired off of my playing KOTOR in which I play a female Revan. Also I love the Star Wars Universe however my knowledge is limited but hopefully you will enjoy this story!

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