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Thunderclan

By Zirafan

Other / Adventure

Thunderclan

"Your sure we should be here I mean we're breaking the warrior code?" The gray kit said as the kits crouched by the thunderpath."You worry to much Graykit." The other one a golden tabby with bright green eyes said. Graykit, the tabby kit with gray fur and darker green eyes cast a glance at the thunderpath in front of them. "Mom's gonna be so mad at us." Graykit muttered under her breath. The golden tabby rolled her eyes. She could smell the lake from here. "I told you were never gonna get caught." The golden tabby said. "I wanna leave Olivekit." Graykit complained. "Just across the thunderpath." Olivekit muttered. "Are you even listening to me?" Graykit asked with irritation in her voice. "Yeah." Olivekit said getting ready to leap.

"Woah you crazy?" Graykit asked. It was one thing to leave Shadowclan camp but this..this was well bad. "Come on it's only a small thunderpath well cross bigger ones today." Olivekit paused before continuing "unless of course your scared? Are you?" Olivekit's eyes gleamed as she asked this. "No!" Graykit said with force that surprised her. "Good." Olivekit said and then she took off across the thunderpath. "Olivekit!" Graykit yelled after her sister. Was she crazy?

"Come on over" Olivekit yelled back. A sudden instinct hit Graykit and she backed away. "I'm sorry I'm not coming..I can't do it...I'm scared." Graykit said. "Fine I'm coming back over!" Olivekit called. Graykit turned away from the rough black surface of the thunderpath and into the Pines of Shadowclan territory. A warm comforting smell.

Olivekit was walking across the thunderpath casting glances at the other side. Longing glances. "Come on hurry up!" Graykit called nervously. "I'm coming I'm coming!" Olivekit called. "Great Starclan be patient!" Olivekit said. "Mommy wouldn't want you saying that." Graykit said. "Well she's not here is she?" Olivekit asked. "No.." Graykit began. "Right so I can say and do what I want!" Olivekit said smiling. Her eyes gleamed in the early morning sunlight. "Just hurry up! I think something bad's gonna happen if you don't.." Graykit said. "Lookout!" Graykit called but it was to late a monster dove away from her sister but her sister was knocked to the ground and one of her legs made a crack sound against a tree.

"Olivekit!" Graykit cried as she ran for her sister. A couple of Twolegs got out of the monster. One ran towards them. "Stay away from my sister!" Graykit yowled. This seemed to only make the Twolegs come faster though.

"We found 'em." came Ratscar's gruff call. Graykit never thought she'd be so glad to hear his voice as she was then. Owlclaw, Rowanstar, Tawnypelt, Snowbird and Olivenose came bursting trough the bushes hissing at the Twolegs. The Twolegs let out a strain of strange angry Twoleg sounds and cusses before jumping back in their red monster and driving away.

"Are you alright?" Tawnypelt asked gruffly. "Yes is Olivekit going to be okay?" Graykit asked. "I don't know.." Tawnypelt said her gaze drifted and filled with tears. Graykit had heard Tigerheart tell her stories about Flametail and his death. She had never known her brother but she new her mother lost him while he was still a medicine cat apprentice. She probably was worried about losing another kit Graykit realized. "I never should have gone out of the camp with her then maybe this wouldn't have happened." Graykit said bitterly. "It's not your fault okay whatever happens it's not because of you do you understand?" Tawnypelt asked her voice was serious. "Yes." Graykit said.

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