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Friends and lovers in Abnegation

By booksaremylife10


Chapter 1

My name is Beatrice prior and the first time when I met Tobias Eaton was when I was 11 and he, 13.


This had become a daily routine for me. Every day in school people from other factions would bully and tease me for being a stiff (the nickname for an abnegation) and so scrawny and also taking my lunch and of course I couldn't do anything about it as I was abnegation and we were supposed to be selfless.

But one day a boy stood up for me he was from abnegation but didn't look like one. He had a tall, muscular build and a hooked nose, black hair and deep, sea blue eyes that needless to say were mesmerizing. He could have been made a dauntless prodigy as he stood in front of me and told the other factions to back off. They ran like children towards candy to get away from him.

He then offered his hand toward me and pulled me up with a strong but gentle pull making me stumble slightly. He then asked if I was okay. I nodded and mumbled a quick, inaudible thank you and ran off.

Flashback continues

Two days later:

The bullying had become less frequent in fact it had almost stopped since that boy had stood up for me and I think Tobias Eaton was his name. Son of the leader of Abnegation, Marcus Eaton. So of course he had a small amount of power even though it was forbidden to draw attention to himself the way he had done while defending me.

The Erudite had been publishing pretty foul articles about Marcus lately. Most of them were accusations of beating his son which would obviously be false since he was the leader of abnegation.

As I walked into class with my head bowed low I bumped into Tobias except this time he winced as if by bumping into him a healing wound had been hit. I mumbled a sorry and continued walking. But he had caught ahold of my hand and had pulled me back saying that he didn't catch my name the first time we had met.

I was still shocked from the way he had grabbed my arm as in abnegation too much skin contact wasn't allowed. I murmured "Beatrice prior" softly and he grinning wildly asked me to be his friend and I couldn't think of anything but say yes.

~~~~Flashback ends ~~~~

Tears come to my eyes when I think about the time he told me he had to leave abnegation because of his father. All the articles said about Marcus were true he was cruel and deceitful. Because he was the reason Tobias left me.

We were friends for 2 years and on our second year anniversary of being friends we met at a spot under a tree close to our house.

He had told me that he thought of me has more than a friend and then he leaned in and kissed me.

I was stiff in shock and then he pulled back. His eyes sad. But then I surprised myself and him to by the pulling his face toward mine and kissing him and he asked me to be his girlfriend.

We were a secret couple for one year before he had to leave. I had cried for nights after that.

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