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The Three Way Dance

By Jackie Anne Buckley

Action / Erotica

Chapter 1

Jackie looked at Jason with heat and hunger.  She wanted him in a bad way.  It was too bad that he’s married.  She would’ve given him his every dream and more.  It was a sad moment because now they were saying their goodbyes.  She knew she shouldn’t be doing this, but she couldn’t stop herself from grabbing his hands and holding them in hers.  “I can’t believe you’re leaving the WWF!  I’m really gonna miss you.” she said to him, tears forming in her eyes.  He tried to smile, tried to brighten the sad atmosphere, but failed miserably.  “I’ll miss you too.  We had a good time here.  You know, The Brood, The Peep Show… You were the light during these terrible gimmicks.”  She laughed sadly, a tear escaping and sliding down her cheek.  Jason’s heart dropped.  He didn’t want to see this.  “Don’t cry.  We’ll see each other again some day.” he promised, wiping the tear away with his thumb.
Jackie nodded, even though she didn’t believe it.  She felt as if he would just move on with his life.  With his jealous wife, he’d never get away to spend time with her or even call her.  Throughout their time together in the WWE, they shared little moments of intimacy from hugs to kisses on the cheek.  She had always wanted more, and he knew it, but he’d never cross that line with her.  He couldn’t hurt her in that way, making her think there could be something between them when there couldn’t.  His wife would likely kill him.  She handed him her card with her contact numbers on it.  “Please don’t forget me.  Call me any time.” she told him.  He slipped the card into his back pocket and promised her that he would do that.  She looked like her heart was breaking.  He couldn’t help himself but to pull her into his arms and press her as close to him as he could.  Her arms came around him as her composure fell apart and the tears that she’d been holding back just came loose.  He rubbed her back, her long silky hair tangling in his fingers, making his heart ache more.
Time seemed to stop until finally they let go of each other.  As they stood apart, he looked at her face, streaked red from tears and wished that he didn’t have to go.  But it was too late for that.  “Well, I have to go now, Jack.  I wish I could stay, but I don’t have a choice.  I’ll call you when I can.” Jason said to her.  As he started to turn away, she plunged into him, hooking her arms around his neck and kissing him on the mouth.  His eyes were so wide open with surprise he thought they might pop out of the sockets.  She forced herself away and stared at him as if she was surprised she did that.  “I’m sorry, I didn’t mean…  I couldn’t help it…  I…” Jackie tried to explain, then she turned and ran crying into her locker room, slamming the door shut.  Jason stood there for a minute, thinking about what just happened.  He actually smiled for real this time as he grabbed his bag and left the arena, leaving the WWE behind for good.

That was five years ago, and Jason could still remember it as if it had happened yesterday.  He never forgot the hurt look in Jackie’s eyes as he said goodbye.  He never forgot the wet tears staining his shirt as she cried into his chest.  He never forgot the feel of her soft lips, the sweet taste of them when she kissed him.  He never forgot the sight of her running away to cry all her sorrow away.  He thought about her off and on over the years, wishing he had done things differently.  He wished he’d taken the time to take her out to a private dinner.  Whatever happened after that, he wouldn’t have regretted.  He was starting to think that he was feeling the same way about her as she does about him.  He had gone through these last few years like a zombie.  Well, not at TNA.  He loves it there.  He was actually happy when he was doing a show.  But afterwards, when he had to come home to his wife and kiss her in greeting and go on acting as if their marriage was normal, well, that’s when the zombie comes in.  His interest in her was fading more and more by the day, and his thoughts kept returning to Jackie.  
Jason would be in Peoria tomorrow for a show.  Coincidentally, WWE would be in Rosemont for a show.  He intended on calling Jackie and trying to meet up.  He hoped she wouldn’t be upset that he hadn’t called after all these years.  He hoped she would understand and be willing to participate in his plans.  All he could do for now is wait and hope and go on about his life as if it were normal.  His wife had been trying to be amorous to him earlier, but his thoughts were so deep that he couldn’t get into it.  She was disappointed, especially since she knew he would be out of town for a couple days, but she couldn’t tell because he just rolled over, putting his back to her, and pretended that he was asleep.  All he could think about was Jackie.  He closed his eyes and tried to count sheep to help him fall asleep, but instead of seeing sheep, all he could see was Jackie’s sweet face looking lovingly at him.  He missed her badly.  Finally, some time around midnight, he drifted to sleep.

As soon as Jason got off the airplane, he reached for the card he’d put in his wallet.  It had been there all these years.  He punched in the number on his cell phone, praying that she would answer.
Jackie was pumping up her abs when her phone began to ring.  Grumbling that it better be someone important, she stopped her work out and went to answer it.  “Hello!” she answered, wiping the sweat from her brow with a towel.  She’d been working for quite some time now.
Jason’s heart leapt when he heard her voice.  A smile involuntarily spread across his face.  “Jack!  How’ve you been?”
Jackie’s heart dropped.  Could it be?  “Jay?” she asked carefully.
“Yeah, it’s me!” he said with such joy in his voice, “I’m sorry I haven’t called.  I know it’s been a long time.  You have no idea how glad I am that you answered your phone.”
“Yeah, it has been a long time.  I was beginning to think that you’d never call me.  It’s great to hear from you.  How are ya?”  She struggled to keep her voice calm.  Inside, she wanted to scream with joy.
“Not bad.  I’m actually somebody important in TNA.  Wrestling’s been good to me lately.  However, things haven’t been so great at home.” he admitted.
“What do you mean?”
“I don’t want to talk about it on the phone.  I was hoping I could come see you after the show and we could talk about it.”  Inadvertently, his fingers were crossed.“Yes, of course.  My home will always be open to you.  Call me when you’re on your way.”
“I’ll do that.  Thanks, Jack.  I knew you’d be understanding.  I know it doesn’t seem like it, but I really do appreciate you.  I’ll prove it to you later tonight, I promise.  I really missed you.”She smiled and laughed, she was so happy.  “I missed you too.  I can’t wait to see you.”  They said their goodbyes and hung up.  Jackie’s heart was beating so fast she thought it might explode.  Jason actually called her, after all this time.  He hadn’t forgotten her.  But what was all this trouble he spoke of?  She worried.  Is everything all right?  She couldn’t wait until tonight.

Later on that night, after Jackie’s match, she was sitting in her locker room, brushing her hair when there was a knock at the door.  She went over to the door and opened it to a grinning John Hennigan.  He instantly pulled her into his arms, his hands firmly on her ass, and squeezed her hard.  “Are you ready to go?  I am.” he exclaimed, kissing her neck.  She giggled wildly.  “Yes, just let me get my bag.” she replied, grabbing her bag and rushing behind a hurrying John.  “John, wait!  I want to tell you something.” she called.  He was halfway down the hall already, but stopped and waited until she caught up.  “Okay, but you better make it quick ‘cuz I can’t wait much longer.” he told her truthfully.  They had been sexually involved for the past six months, not really dating, just enjoying each other’s bodies.  It helped get her mind off of Jason, if only momentarily, and it kept her happy and feeling good.  John Hennigan was a magnificent lover.  “I didn’t get to tell you earlier that I have plans for tonight.  If you want-“  He cut her off.  “That’s okay, babe.  We’ll fit them in.  I’ll help you with whatever you gotta do.” he offered.  She grinned.  That sounded like a great idea, if indeed what she hopes will happen comes true.  “I appreciate the offer, but I think this is something that I need to do in private.  An old friend of mine is in town and he sounded upset on the phone this morning.” she explained.  John nodded.  “Ah, I see.  I’ll pick up some beer then and we’ll set things right.” he persisted.  She sighed.  She knew he wouldn’t let up.  He was horny.  “Alright, John, you can come along, but if he’s uncomfortable, we’ll have to continue this later.”  It was his turn to sigh then.  “Alright.  Let’s go then.”

They arrived at her home twenty minutes later.  On the way, Jason called and said he’s on his way.  Peoria was about an hour drive so John had plenty of time to have Jackie to himself.  He carried her straight into her bedroom.  He knew exactly where it was, and landed right on top of her as he plopped her onto her bed.  His lips were all over her face and neck.  Her hands went up his sexy muscular back, pulling his shirt up.  His teeth were scraping her neck, his mouth suckled, leaving a mark behind.  He was molding her breasts with his hands as he did this.  Her legs were wide open, letting him settle in between.  She could feel his penis pushing against the front of his jeans.  It made her hot.  She pulled his shirt off completely.  Her hands came up to explore his sexy chest.  As he worked her neck, he slid a hand of his own down her pants and fondled her ass while the other hand still fondled her breast.  “Ooh, John… you’ve got to stop with my neck.  You can’t brand me, ya know.” Jackie drawled out drowsily.  He let go, but her neck still felt like it was on fire, trailing a hot feeling all throughout her body.  There was just something about John that made her feel alive with need.  At that moment, her doorbell rang.  John looked disappointed.  “Damn!” he cursed.  Jackie hopped out of the bed as he rolled off her and she went toward the door.  “Stay right here.  I’ll be back.” she promised and closed the door behind her.
She raced to the front door and flung it open.  There stood Jason, all six foot two, handsome as ever.  She wanted to jump into his arms, but knew it was too soon.  “Jay!  So good to see you.  You look good.  Come in.” she invited.  He crossed the threshold, looking around at the dark rooms around him.  “Why are the lights out?  Is there a power outage?” he asked.  That would be alright.  They could light some candles and make love all night.  “Oh.” Jackie said, embarrassed.  She was so heated up from John’s ministrations that she hadn’t noticed.  “No, I just forgot to turn them on.” she replied as she flicked them on.  Now that they were in the light, he could see her more clearly and the first thing he noticed was a good-sized red bruise on the side of her neck.  Looking her over, he also noticed that her hair was messy.  Realization hit him and it made his heart slam into his stomach, sickening him.  He should’ve known that she wouldn’t have waited for him.  Well why should she?  He’s married.  She’d been teasing him for years to divorce the woman and come home to her, but he’d always thought she was joking.  Why should he be upset that she’d found another man?  She’s a beautiful woman, young and full of spirit.  She has needs just like everyone else.  She couldn’t just sit there all her life hoping that he would come to his senses and come to her.  Even though he tried to reason with himself about all this, it still made him hurt.  It felt like a million knives were carving him from the inside out, gutting him like a Jack-o-lantern.  He swallowed hard.  “I’m sorry.  I didn’t know I was interrupting something.  Why didn’t you tell me when I called?"  Jackie frowned, confused.  Then realization hit.  She knew she had a huge hickey on her neck.  John!! she growled inwardly.  She straightened up her shirt and smoothed her hair.  “Oh, Jay, anything can wait for you.  I know you’re upset about something.  You came all this way to tell me.  You expect me to turn you away now?  Come sit with me and tell me what’s wrong.”  She guided him onto the couch, sitting down with a knee up so she could face him fully.  He looked so troubled that she wanted to cry for him.  He sighed and decided that it would be best to just tell her what was on his mind.  Even if she did find another man to love, at least she would know the truth.  He felt that she deserved it.  He took her hands in his and looked her straight in the eyes.  “Jackie.  I’ve made a mistake.  You’ve been telling me for a long time and I misinterpreted everything.  It’s all my fault, but…”  He paused, waiting for a reaction from her.  Anything, just to let him know what she’s feeling.  Good or bad, he would accept it, just so long as he knew.  “Tell me.” she prompted, looking at him with those familiar eyes that comforted him.  He knew that look.  She was still in love with him.  His heart sprang up with rejoice.  It gave him the courage to finish what he knew he had to say.  “Things have not been going so well at home for me.  I can’t touch my wife anymore.  It’s not her fault.  I just can’t be with her.  All I can think about is being with you.  I kick myself every day for hurting you that day we said goodbye.  I knew I should have taken you somewhere.  I knew you were the right one for me, but I wasn’t listening to the signs.  I know it’s too late, but I just wanted you to know the truth.”  She smiled at him, tears filling up in her eyes.  She held his hands to her heart.  “Oh, Jay.  It’s never too late.” she replied.  She blinked and it triggered the unshed tears to drip down her face.  Jason watched the little glistening drops on her cheeks and it tempted him.  Before he could stop himself, he was leaning over to kiss them away.  He tasted the salty wetness on her face, his heart leaping at her love for him.  When he pulled back, he said, “What did you mean when you said it’s never too late?  It looks to me as if you’ve been....”  He couldn’t bring himself to say it.  She looked ashamed.  Listening to Jason’s confession, she’d forgotten all about John in her bedroom.  “Jay.  I’m not gonna lie to you.  I have been involved with a man for a few months now, but I have to admit that it’s only sex.  There’s no commitment.” she admitted.  His hand came up and touched her face, needing the contact.  “Oh, Jack, look at what I’ve done to you.  That’s not healthy for you.”  He didn’t want to know, not really, but he couldn’t help himself.  He just had to ask.  “Who?”  She blushed a bright red at the question.  It made her feel naughty at her attraction for the “Tuesday Night Delight.”  She couldn’t look at him when she told him.  “Johnny Nitro?” asked Jason, astonished, “He’s not even your type.”  She looked up at him then.  “Well, like I said, we’re not really in a relationship.  Forget it.  I don’t feel for him what I feel for you.  I never will.” she confessed.  That made him feel so good that he took her petite body onto his lap and kissed her full on the mouth.  It took her aback so hard that she was too shocked to kiss back at first.  Then her hands slid up his chest to circle around his shoulders and she kissed him just like the way she’d fantasized for years.  When they pulled apart, she was smiling at him so contentedly that it almost made his heart burst.  Finally he had her in his arms.  It was like a dream come true.  She climbed out of his lap, holding him by the hand and leading him to the back of the house.  He was so excited about what he knew was about to happen that he actually grew a couple inches in his pants.  When she opened the door to her bedroom on the second floor, he heard a man’s voice say, “Finally!  I thought you’d never come back!”  Nitro!  Jason cringed, intense jealousy threatening to eat him alive.  Jackie pulled him into the room with her and he saw John Hennigan lying across Jackie’s bed as if he belonged there.  Well, he realized, that he’d probably been there so many times that he probably felt like he did belong there.  He was shirtless and, despite how long Jackie had been gone, he still had a full hard on pressing painfully against his jeans.  He sat up.  “Oh, so you’re the old friend Jackie was talking about earlier.” John said as he got out of bed and stepped over to them holding out his hand, “Nice to meet you, Cage.  She talks about you so much I feel like I already know you.”  It felt so awkward that he almost didn’t shake his hand, but he did so just to make Jackie happy.  Jason was even more upset than he was earlier.  What was going on here?  Just seconds ago, he thought he and Jackie were going to have sex, and now he’s in her bedroom with John Morrison?  The tension was building up fast.  There was so much testosterone in the room that Jackie thought they were going to fight.  She had to get one of them out of here, but which one?  She couldn’t just kick John out right now with that amazing hard on.  That would be cruel and unfair.  He’d been giving her all sorts of favors that she was lucky to even get.  However, she couldn’t throw Jason out either.  It had been her fantasy since she was practically a little girl to crawl into bed with him.  And he definitely had higher status than Hennigan, that was for fuckin’ sure.  Well, then it would have to be both of them then, if she could get them to get along.  “Guys, I have a suggestion.  Both of you want to be here with me right now, but I can’t choose one over the other.  So, I think it would be in everybody’s best interest if we all just get along.”  The men just looked at her like she was crazy.  “What are you talking about?” Jason asked, not liking where she could be going with this.  She sat down on the edge of the bed, grinning from ear to ear, and said, “Let me put it this way.  It’s either both of you, or neither one of you.”  John looked thoroughly pissed off.  “What!?  You don’t expect me to…”  Jason was so stunned that he didn’t say anything.  Jackie shrugged.  “Those are my terms.  Nonnegotiable.  Take it or leave it.” she replied as she slid off her pants to reveal a small pink thong.  “I’ll take it!” said John, hurrying towards her, but Jason pulled him away before he could get there.  John turned to the other guy, his face contorting with anger.  They were nose to nose now.  Their burly chests pressing a challenge into each other.  “Oh, you think you’re a tough guy?” John snarled, forgetting about the naked lady on the bed.  “If you touch her, I’ll kill you.” Jason promised.  “Oh yeah, we’ll I’ve been touching her every night for the last six months.  What you gonna do about it?”  Jason looked so mad that Jackie thought he might rip John’s head off.  She had to intervene, and fast.  “Alright, fellas.  It’s getting late.  Why don’t we just call it a day and we’ll do this some other time?” Jackie interrupted, muscling her way in between them.  Jason looked regretful now, the madness leaving his eyes as he turned them on her.  “I’m sorry.  I didn’t mean to get so violent.  I don’t want to leave.  I haven’t seen you in a long time.” he apologized.  “Yeah, he’s been neglecting you ever since he went to his stinkin’ TNA and now you wanna take him back and leave me hangin’?” John taunted.  Jackie turned to John with a warning on her face.  “John, there ain’t a thing about you that’s hanging and you know it.”  Her statement actually made him laugh and it loosened up some of the tension in the room.  “Now can we get along here or am I gonna have to kick ya’ll out?” she asked, her final offer.  “I’ll be good.  I ain’t the one with the problem.” John said.  Jason was thinking this whole thing sucks.  This wasn’t what he envisioned at all.  It wasn’t his dream come true, but it was all he had.  “Don’t worry about me.  I’ll be nice.” he promised.  Jackie nodded and removed Jason’s shirt to even the odds.  “Good.  Now I expect no foul play here or it’s over.  I mean it.”  To start things off, Jackie had to relax some of those tense muscles on Jason’s body.  He still looked a bit mad, but she wanted him hot in another way.  She placed some soft kisses around his chest, shoulders, neck, everywhere, not caring or watching where she was going.  She was too happy that she finally had him to care about anything.  She didn’t mean to ignore John, but her mind was gone the second her lips touched Jason’s flat nipple.  Jason was watching her with amusement.  John was watching with a big frown on his face.  He wanted to protest, but was afraid she’d throw him out.  So instead he came up behind her, releasing his beast, and swept her panties aside to slide himself into her warm fun patch.  She welcomed him with hot wetness that made him sizzle at finally getting it.  She moaned softly into Jason’s mouth, running her tongue along his front teeth and plunging in deeper.  She was distracting him so well with the kissing that he’d already forgotten that there was another man in the room and that he was fucking his girl.  When Jason realized what was going on behind Jackie, he secretly fumed inside but instead of reacting harshly, he pretended like he was innocent and laid back onto the bed, taking her with him.  The action pulled John right out of her.  He wanted to laugh so bad that he almost did, but she saved him by ravishing his mouth some more.  Jackie was loosening his belt and shoving his pants off his hips, completely oblivious to John’s plight.  All she knew was that she was full a second ago and she wanted something back in her right away.  John angrily but quietly kicked the rest of his clothes off and joined the lovebirds on the bed, placing himself in between Jackie’s butt cheeks.  He was all slimy and loving it as he slid up the two soft mounds like a hot dog between a bun.  She didn’t seem to notice and that made him mad.  He wanted to make her come.  That’ll make her forget Mr. TNA.  With a devious grin on his face, John plunged rather roughly into her.  It satisfied him that she bucked her head up and shivered with pleasure.  He was glad she stopped smooching all over Cage.  It was starting to make him limp.  Well, not really, he thought.  He just didn’t like it.  However, it didn’t take her attention off of Jason at all, and she was stroking his lengthening dick even as John pumped her the best he could.  That made him clamp his hands onto her ass and work it even harder.  Jackie was trailing her tongue down Jason’s stomach, slowly making her way downstairs.  She was deliberately teasing him and it made him grow even harder while he waited.  John was getting really upset seeing this other guy staring down at his woman as if she belonged to no one else, but he was getting so hot now that he closed his eyes to it.  His knuckles were getting white and he couldn’t hold back any longer.  He ripped out of his hot haven and squirted a hot wad of sperm straight into Jason’s face.  He didn’t mean to, but he was glad he did.  The look on Jason’s face was so funny that he wanted to laugh until tomorrow.  Jackie was hovering right over Jason’s dick, her hot breath tickling the head, when a sound made her look up.  She saw the milky substance hanging off of Jason’s nose and almost laughed herself.  “It’s okay, baby.” she whispered, trying to comfort him.  She knew he was disgusted.  So she licked and sucked and kissed it all away until his face was once again clean.  That made him feel better.  She had a way of making him feel like the most important person in the world and he forgot all about John’s childish games, keeping his mind on more important things.  He pulled Jackie’s shirt off and tossed it carelessly aside.  John finally came back to his senses and saw that Jackie was still ignoring him.  He was furious.  He was so determined to get her off that he actually only accomplished his own release.  She was holding out on him on purpose.  Oh yeah, well you won’t be able to hold out for long, he thought to himself, I know all your weaknesses.  So John flipped Jackie off of Jason and onto her back.  He climbed aboard, grinning at her all the while, and slipped right back inside her.  It didn’t take him long to pick it back up where he left off.  Then it was Jason who sat there like nobody loved him, but Jackie signaled for him to come over and sit on her.  He settled with one knee on each side of her head and she pulled his hot throbbing penis into her mouth as far as she could go.  The feeling was so good that he almost lost his balance and fell onto John, but Jackie held onto him, making sure he didn’t go away.  She wanted to draw it out and tease until he was begging her.  Seeing that Jason was thoroughly enjoying himself, John had to make sure he was having just as much fun.  It would please him greatly if only he could feel her orgasm rippling around him.  He loved that more than anything else and he wanted to make her come more than he wanted to wake up in the morning.  He knew how he could get it too, so he slowed himself down and softly ground his hips into her a few times.  He knew if he hit that one particular spot in the right way that she would be wriggling in no time.  Sure enough, she soon was writhing and moaning, even with Jason’s cock in her mouth.  He waited until she was good and hot, and then pulled out of her.  It actually made her stop her work on Jason and speak to him.  “Oh, John, don’t stop.  That feels so good.” she requested.  John just stood there looking satisfied at torturing her, a hard on so full that it was pointing straight up in the air and slapping himself in the stomach.  “Jay…” Jackie said almost breathlessly, “Care to take over?”  Jason moved so fast that he was already in her before John could even reach the bed.  She was so hot and inviting that he almost moaned out loud.  He laid over her, covering her completely so that there was no room for John to get back in.  He was deliberately hogging her and it made John curse out loud.  Hearing the loud oath, Jackie turned her head to see John red in the face and his cock so hard that she thought it might rival steel.  She felt sorry for him so she invited him to get back in the bed.  “Come here, Johnny boy.  You’re missing out.” she crooned, and John was in her face, sliding his cock so deep into her mouth that he was going down her throat.  It didn’t stop her from cooing at Jason’s sweet movements inside her.  It felt like nothing John had ever given her.  He buried his face in her hair and was tickling her ear with his tongue.  She reached out and was kneading John’s balls as she gave him the best blow job he’d ever gotten from anyone.  She made him come so fast that he didn’t even bother pulling out and just shot his shit straight down her throat.  After that dizzying experience, he just fell onto the floor and almost fell asleep.  What made him become aware again was Jackie’s heated moaning of Jason’s name, over and over.  She wanted to hold out just a little longer, but she just couldn’t anymore.  Jason was hitting her just right and it drove her to ecstasy.  Before she could finish her last orgasm, her body was shaking from another one.  John hopped up so fast that his head almost spun.  He always knew when she came, and right now he knew.  Jason had stolen his moment, his favorite moment.  When he realized that she was having her third orgasm in a row, he knew he’d seen enough.  He quickly dressed in a rage.  Jason had his forehead pressed against Jackie’s, their noses scrunched together as their eyes locked and their sweat mixed.  It almost made John’s stomach roll.  “See ya!” he growled as he escaped out the door.  “Bye…” Jackie said so softly that he didn’t even hear her.  She was too deep in euphoria to even speak.  Jason was still moving his hips, so close now that he couldn’t stop, even when he spermed inside her.  It was a funny moment when Jason realized that his pants were still bunched around his ankles and his shoes were still on.  Funnier still when Jackie slid off her ripped, soggy underwear.  So spent were they from happiness, that they just crawled underneath the sheets and fell asleep in each other’s arms.


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